Merry Meet Hill Princess. I like this poem. The repetition worked great in this. It made sure that I didn't forget how you portrayed the girl. The poem made me think of my younger sister who killed herself. For all the world, she put on a face, but inside she shriveled to waste.
like the others have said before me.. this reminds me of someone.. i really like this.. s4 is really cool and the repetition really drives it home. i hope she will listen to you soon, realise the talent she has, i hope my friend will too
first I like the picture..black and white photos...I don't know HOW but they always seem so much more powerful than color..now the poem..I liked it a lot cause it made me think of a girl I know. the ending is really cool but the fourth stanza stuck out in my mind, it was really striking, the image you build of the girl.
This made me think about myself a while ago and how I used to be the person who you could always count on to party and fucc around with. I seemed like a real chipper individual, yet always dark. But I always appeared to be happy when in fact I was not. I wore plain, non flashy clothes and had a regular haircut. The only thing that was a glimpse of my real personality were my tatoos. Other than that I looked like any regular schmoe. Inside I was cursing everything I saw that I hated in the world and in my life. I wasn't one of those boohoo wah wah crybabies but I know I wasn't too happy. Anyway Iv'e probably butchered your poem with my long rant of a relation but anyhoo. I liked this and it brought back some ol memories.