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    dots Submission Name: Pink Girldots
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    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsPink Girldots
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    There is this girl.
    She wears pink.
    Pretends to be happy.
    The whole time her heart sinks.

    She touches the world with warm hands.
    Sings songs of sunsets and life.
    Bounces from situation to situation without plans.
    Tries to forget her own strife.

    There is this girl.
    She wears pink.
    Pretends to be happy.
    The whole time her heart sinks.

    She eats pieces of candy for dinner.
    Resembles a piece of art.
    Writes words which inspire.
    Pretends she isn't smart.

    There is this girl.
    She wears pink.
    Pretends to be happy.
    The whole time her heart sinks.

    She dreams of lost spirits.
    Speaks using honesty and devotion.
    Paints with unknown colors and shapes.
    Her mind in constant motion.

    There is this girl.
    A pink girl.
    Who can't catch her heart.




    Submitted on 2004-09-01 03:05:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Merry Meet Hill Princess. I like this poem. The repetition worked great in this. It made sure that I didn't forget how you portrayed the girl. The poem made me think of my younger sister who killed herself. For all the world, she put on a face, but inside she shriveled to waste.

    Good job. Blessed Be Andrea
    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]
      like the others have said before me.. this reminds me of someone.. i really like this.. s4 is really cool and the repetition really drives it home. i hope she will listen to you soon, realise the talent she has, i hope my friend will too
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by wilderness | [ Reply to This ]
      first I like the picture..black and white photos...I don't know HOW but they always seem so much more powerful than color..now the poem..I liked it a lot cause it made me think of a girl I know. the ending is really cool but the fourth stanza stuck out in my mind, it was really striking, the image you build of the girl.
    | Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say this is an excellent poem. I liked the description it really brought me to this pink girls place and i could see her in a way. Reminds me alot of my best friend. Good work!~*~amber~*~
    | Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me think about myself a while ago and how I used to be the person who you could always count on to party and fucc around with. I seemed like a real chipper individual, yet always dark. But I always appeared to be happy when in fact I was not. I wore plain, non flashy clothes and had a regular haircut. The only thing that was a glimpse of my real personality were my tatoos. Other than that I looked like any regular schmoe. Inside I was cursing everything I saw that I hated in the world and in my life. I wasn't one of those boohoo wah wah crybabies but I know I wasn't too happy. Anyway Iv'e probably butchered your poem with my long rant of a relation but anyhoo. I liked this and it brought back some ol memories.

    Take care
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    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]


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