A boy without a father by ibelikeso

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Author:	ibelikeso
ASL Info:	21/m/FL
Elite Ratio:	5.19 - 117/96/20
Words:	212

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	479
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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for any one who has ever felt like no one was there to offer guidance in life... we can only feel like helpless children crying out for help.

A boy without a father dots

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A boy without a father
Is what I have been all my life.
I have only a guardian angel
God has sent to help me survive,

Its someone I can't feel nor touch
and even though I can't see him,
I long to hear the words;
“I love you so much!".

Yet I know I have a Father,
He's in the heavens above.
He always looks upon me
All alone on the earth below.

He knows the pain that I feel
As my tears won't stop to flow.
"When will this suffering end?!"
Is what I’d like to know.

"When can I see my father?!” so he can take away my pain.
"When I leave this world, this life, will any memories remain?"
I'm sorry for hurting anyone I have ever came across
I can't go back in time to make the wrong things right,

So I will hold on to the loss.
I feel so incomplete and hollow only emptiness inside.
The glass has over flown with all the tears that I have cried.
"So please, take me by the hand help me get a little farther."
"Can’t you see I’m all alone, I’m just a boy... a boy without a father."

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  oh , this is so sad. But well written. I like these two lines...

I feel so incomplete and hollow only emptiness inside.
The glass has over flown with all the tears that I have cried.

I feel like that now but not because I don't have a father. My friends, one who didn't have a father and one who had an awful one, once got into a discussion about weather they'd rather have an awful father or no father at all. I think thats a hard question, at least for someone who isn't really in iether posistion. But anyways, I hope the best for you and that you can , well not move on but do the best you can do with these feelings. great write.
| Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
  That was beautiful in both its simplicity and its straightforward delivery. The truth that lay in within this composition is one that I can relate to - both in the lack of a natural fathering and recognising the spiritual Fathering that has been provided for by virtue of and the continuing power of One hung on a tree for the remission of all that leads to spiritual death. Keep proclaiming to this generation the great and wonderful news.
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
  when i was little i wanted to be a daddy when i grew up (kinda hard to do though since im a girl but i didnt realise i had to be a boy to grow up into a daddy at the time...) but i knew how important dads are and i also knew that if i was a dad i wouldnt drink all the time...
i know that its hard to grow up without a parent but i do know that God puts ppl in our lives to fill that void... ive had many 'surrogate' parents throughout my childhood and teen years who have been there for me when my own parents couldnt... couldnt see where i was at and needed help or whatever... i thank God for all of them though some of them are hardly in my world anymore... it was like they were there for a season and then moved on...
its awesome you know that God is your father... it can be hard to identify with him as a father when you havent had a positive father figure here on earth...
god is so proud of you and he loves you so much and he looks down upon you and he says to his angels and to Jesus on the side "theres my boy... gee im so proud of him" i promise he does...
take care of you
bye for now
Jaydee
| Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  "When can I see my father?!” so he can take away my pain.
"When I leave this world, this life, will any memories remain?"
I'm sorry for hurting anyone I have ever came across
I can't go back in time to make the wrong things right,

So I will hold on to the loss.
I feel so incomplete and hollow only emptiness inside.
The glass has over flown with all the tears that I have cried.
"So please, take me by the hand help me get a little farther."
"Can’t you see I’m all alone, I’m just a boy... a boy without a father."

I don't believe you are tormented...hell I was tormented...my father just decided he didn't want to be my father anymore...he cut a piece of my heart and swallowed it whole...now what kind of man, would hold his daughter's hand and then cut her heart and keep it bleeding,that's no man
| Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
  This has deep feeling in it. And it's a good write too. But at some points it rhymes, and the others... it doesn't. I believe a poem can be good and not rhyme, but you've got to decide whether or not it is. Cause during this, I sorta got confused, cause of the mixture of rhyming. It's good, don't get me wrong. I liked it. But... just choose between rhyming or not next time.
| Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is sad... I liked the poem, but it is very depressing, I feel very sorry for you, I hope you feel better someday... and I understand that no matter what people say.. the feeling lives on, so at least try to get away from it all, keep writing and make friends, have a good relationship with your family and in some way, it will help... in some way. Take care and I hope you find your way. Keep writing, you're good.
| Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by April0414 | [ Reply to This ]
  can relate, but on the other side, grew up without a mother, I enjoyed this although I think you can make it flow even better, but don't mind me, the emotion is yours and it's very nice, keep writing, you are very talented...Bob:)
| Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay, firstly this is me, I lost my father to years ago unexpectedly and what you've said could fit as my work very easily. I can't really say much else as I can't say I like it of dislike it, its just...me...
| Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  i want to say that i really liked this and i am sorry that you have no father figure in your life i wish i could do something to help. i hope you can find some one to fill the void. i think that this was a good write . welcome to the site. lia
| Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  first off, welcome to elite. u really go the point across! i think u expressed ur feeling very well. i have to agree with sickly...u need to find a male role model to be a surrogate father to u. good luck with the role model thing...i hope u do try to find one. i know one thing for sure...ur son will never feel as if he is without a father.
-Ashleigh
| Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by unfixable | [ Reply to This ]
  you are a tormented young man.you must get over this and find a strong male role model to be a surrogate father to you if you really want to relate to another who might just as well be your father for the time that you will spend in this one and only world.your passion has come across loud and clear.good luck and fare well.
| Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]

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