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    dots Submission Name: a broken heart a broken bonedots
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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 906
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    Description:
       me and a close friend wrote this last year. when i first started feeling open about my poems. MY friend was in a bad realtionship and she got abused so we wrote this.... i know theres mistakes but meh i dont care... hope u like it


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    dotsa broken heart a broken bonedots
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    Takeing authority on someone elses fear.
    Causes pain and suffering for thoses who are dear.
    The bruseis you can see are told to be a lie.
    It leads the person down and makes them start to cry.
    They try so hard to fight it.
    But cant seem to achevie.
    They live with it forever and regret there missery.




    Submitted on 2004-09-01 19:12:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good.. I can really relate to this because friends of mine from last year use to treat me this way. I think this is really good..
    | Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by Kueen_Emerald | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. It sends a deep message to the reader. There are a few spelling mistakes, but overall, it's a good write. You say you and your friend wrote this together? I've never tried writing a poem with a friend before. Maybe I should. Anyways, good job.
    | Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]


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