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    dots Submission Name: the Weird Sistersdots

    Author: leper messiah
    ASL Info:    21~f~New England
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 197/249/38
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    1.0000
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       this one is not finished...but i wanted to post it anyway because i've been away for so long. so keep that in mind please, before you shred the shit outta it...okay? other than that, any comments or suggestions appreciated...had writer's block for soooo long now, i'm amazed i can still do this stuff...and not be so ashamed!~

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    dotsthe Weird Sistersdots

    Made an alliance with the
    Weird sisters the other day...
    and i couldna been gladder
    By the uprooting sinister
    ways they had of reaching in

    Hands that sunk into my
    paleoarctic muck
    like slimy neo-fever,
    they complimented each other
    then emerging from my
    slushy inside full of puddle-
    dives and nothing that wasn't
    held up (by their boney ankles)
    the crows that had pecked
    away at my inter/super/ior...

    And i could feel heat flood
    the holes they had made and
    where they had been
    purple and vitriolic seas
    that antiseptic'd those cages
    were the voices of the Sisters
    hugging their one-time-deal,
    the eyeball, and me in a ribbon-
    typewriter-tape kind of grasp
    i guess i was pretty motionless
    as the surgery seemed to go
    from all bones to no bones

    Submitted on 2004-09-02 12:05:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I dunno, I'm scratchin here. Weird Sisters. Weird is an abstract description that could mean so many things. Are these sisters symbolic of something? So what I get is you were cold inside, they reached in, punched some holes that let the warmth in, some kind of operation, and it's not finished yet. Before you tell me any kind of clue or change anything, could a different title shed some light on the meaning? The title is the one chance you get to tell whatever you wish without having to follow any poetic rules. But I'm babbeling now, hope this poem gets you past the block!
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      i have to agree its gross but yes in a good sort. well another peek into your curious writing. i kinda like your writings, it makes me forget everything, even tho it is so gross. lol.

    well this is like an account less than poetry, but very interesting, i suppose you should end it real soon because then it'll be a little boring.

    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]
      Wooaahh… Gross… But in a good way. The writer's block doesn't show here, really. It probably could be improved, but I think this is brilliant already… Twisted and very cool! Becky
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by SugarMouse | [ Reply to This ]
      They sound like opposites. l am not too sure, but the feel of the over-all of your poem, feels newtral. The writing is very interesting.
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]

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