Description: this one is not finished...but i wanted to post it anyway because i've been away for so long. so keep that in mind please, before you shred the shit outta it...okay? other than that, any comments or suggestions appreciated...had writer's block for soooo long now, i'm amazed i can still do this stuff...and not be so ashamed!~
april
the Weird Sisters -------------------------------------------
Made an alliance with the
Weird sisters the other day...
and i couldna been gladder
By the uprooting sinister
ways they had of reaching in
Hands that sunk into my
paleoarctic muck
like slimy neo-fever,
they complimented each other
then emerging from my
slushy inside full of puddle-
dives and nothing that wasn't
cold
held up (by their boney ankles)
the crows that had pecked
away at my inter/super/ior...
And i could feel heat flood
the holes they had made and
where they had been
purple and vitriolic seas
that antiseptic'd those cages
were the voices of the Sisters
hugging their one-time-deal,
the eyeball, and me in a ribbon-
typewriter-tape kind of grasp
i guess i was pretty motionless
as the surgery seemed to go
from all bones to no bones
I dunno, I'm scratchin here. Weird Sisters. Weird is an abstract description that could mean so many things. Are these sisters symbolic of something? So what I get is you were cold inside, they reached in, punched some holes that let the warmth in, some kind of operation, and it's not finished yet. Before you tell me any kind of clue or change anything, could a different title shed some light on the meaning? The title is the one chance you get to tell whatever you wish without having to follow any poetic rules. But I'm babbeling now, hope this poem gets you past the block! Dave
i have to agree its gross but yes in a good sort. well another peek into your curious writing. i kinda like your writings, it makes me forget everything, even tho it is so gross. lol.
well this is like an account less than poetry, but very interesting, i suppose you should end it real soon because then it'll be a little boring.
Wooaahh… Gross… But in a good way. The writer's block doesn't show here, really. It probably could be improved, but I think this is brilliant already… Twisted and very cool! Becky
Submission Name: the Weird Sisters
