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    dots Submission Name: Damagedots
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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 909
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    Description:
       heres another poem that my friend gave me a title for. she said make one called damage. i tryed to make it ok. but it turned out like this.. love is a difficult thing but i have friends who really r hurt from it so i made this for them all. tell me what u think.... thank u for ur time.xoxoxoxox


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    dotsDamagedots
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    One look was all it took
    to make her see his pain.
    she started to realize what they had
    has changed.
    Her head in her hands.
    tears on her face.
    The damage is un fix able.

    One tear was all it took to make him feel like shit.
    one word could end everything.
    Damage..
    He wuld chatch her when she fell
    she would run to him and kiss her..

    Damage in her eyes.
    the tears in his.
    There love is falling.
    there world is crashing.
    they cant do anything.
    but stand there in the pouring rain.




    Submitted on 2004-09-02 14:18:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      nathasha is ur guy giving you [censored] if he is kick him out and let me come in just kidding anyhow try and let the theme of your pieces run through your poems dont worry it will come naturally and you will love it.
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by webdevil | [ Reply to This ]
      well it is very confusing i didn't reall get a lot of lines. some lines were good but others were a bit confusing as i said before.

    Like she would run to him and kiss her...
    i didn't undersand that line.
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]


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