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    dots Submission Name: Peculiar Devotiondots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPeculiar Devotiondots
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    You love me with a peculiar devotion
    that teenagers have for suicidal rock stars
    with so much admiration and pity
    and surprise that I'm still here,
    but I don't want your pedestal,
    and I'm just sad, I'm always sad,
    no cause for alarm,
    and I know you want to save me,
    but the only thing to save me from
    is you.





    Submitted on 2004-09-02 16:00:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I remember having to do a report for school about Nick Hornby's High Fidelity and there have been this word 'peculiar'. and I didn't really know what it means (not this somehow negative connotation that it has) and fell over it. but now I know it and it fits so well to your poem. 'Like teenagers have for suicidal rock stars' is a great comparison. sometimes we need somebody to save us but sometimes when we're feeling too much protected we rebel against it. I hope it's not from personal experience.
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it alot! i had to laugh at the part about teenagers liking suicidal rock stars, i'll confess i'm totally obsessed with the kind. i like how you say you dont want him to save you or put you on some pedestal like you're fragile and need to be helped. you're sad and you know it and you dont want to be saved, you must be a strong person. great job i loved the last line
    -steph
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      ooh oooh! Can I borrow this?! My Ex boyfriend needs to read it -_- haha...
    I kinda like this... it puts into perspective what most people consider "Love" now. Most of it is more obsessive than love and its just so sad... because some of us sane people realize it -_-
    Oiy... lookin to read more of your stuff.
    -Alli
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
      I often wonder how many times men see past the image we create for them to the real person. The only person who can change something within us is ourself.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Its gotta suck real hardcore to find out someones love is an obsession. Just watch out you never know if they're the stalkerish type. I really enjoyed it and it was indeed powerful.
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by Spankey | [ Reply to This ]


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