Description: I haven't got the faintest clue where this came from and I'm not even sure if the title is spelled right... too many r's for me.
Anyways... yes... just... bear with me... until I discover the meaning of this mess of words that represent my thoughts, my life, my expiriences... everything... I guess...
Bash it if you want ^.^ it needs a good bashing!
Drifting in and out
Of conciousness and void
Bright splashes of pink and yellow
Burst open on the black backdrop
white hot pain rushing through veins
Unable to sit up, afraid to call for help
Screams of silence punctuate
The busy noise of the day
Indecision on life and death
Cannot decide whether to leave or stay
Every bone might be broken
Every blood vessel burst
where is the mercy of the gods
When we need it the most?
Each step that is taken
Sends a jolt up the spine
Forcing the brain to awaken
Perhaps for the very first time
The Real world is taken into perspective
and laughter mingles with the cries
Ally, Somewhere I missed the erotisism in this. To me it sounds like the busy floor of a hospital room where joy and sorrow comingle with pain and numbness of anesthetic. It's okay to experiment to try new styles. Give yourself a while before you edit then go back and see what hits you when you read this. jan
THIS IS WEIRD BUT GOOD WEIRD IT SOUNDED LIKE SOME ONE ...sorry caps...it sounded like someone with a mental disorder afraid of the normalties of life..or maybe someone just having frustration...and can't sit still because everything is an anoyance to them...and their mind is fidgity and they cant think straight...ok...actually im probably wrong...lol..but hey figured i'd give it a try since i read it...really nothing to bash ...lol...i just am not sure what your talking about...can't get this stupid song out of my head...anywho...ange
Submission Name: Erraticism
