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    dots Submission Name: shades of colordots
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    Author: ibelikeso
    ASL Info:    27/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 119/106/24
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Serious
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       this is me and what i do. beleive it or not i am not patriotic. yet i have to be greatful for those who will make the ultimate sacrifice to put others before themselves.


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    dotsshades of colordots
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    You put so much emphasis
    In the color of your skin

    I am not white, i am not black
    I am just right in between

    I have sworn to protect
    The big and the small

    I would die for my country
    The greatest of all

    So please don't judge me
    I am a soldier in deed

    There is only one color
    Red blood when i bleed

    Enjoy all the freedoms
    Others will not see

    Because they are dying for you
    Next to die could be me

    So know these are heroes
    And that was their choice

    To live and to die
    And I will raise up their voice

    It is always a privilege
    to know what they do

    Under that one color sky
    that color is blue

    Our minds can admit
    We see God and his might

    We grab Him so tightly
    As we continue to fight

    There is always a dream
    As we sleep every night

    To see color of peace
    that color is white

    This is so sad
    Yet it is so true

    Someone has died
    For the red white and blue

    No matter their color
    Their purpose was true

    To lay down their lives
    And they did it for you!





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      This is a very nice and well thought out tribute to those who serve and have served. I consider myself patriotic and do fly our flag every day, so I really appreciate your work here.

    You do have a few misspellings which deserve to be corrected for this poem.
    | Posted on 2011-12-01 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Dear ibelikeso You hit the nail on head
    I pray for peace all over the world
    our soldiers don't get the recognition they deserve
    great reading material keep writing good expression
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      there is nothing in this world that could bring these heroes back but only memories. fighting for what's right is all that matters. I knew what you were trying to say from the start and i feel u. people take granted of people of uniform and what they do everyday. regardless of what country, religion or race...when they wear that uniform, they honour an Oath. To misuse and misguide wearing that uniform is a sin and shameful to the Oath taken. Some followed orders and some did what was right. I salute to these fallen heroes and the ones who are alive. Just by wearing a uniform, you are already a hero in my eyes. My prayers to all.

    ~mawwy~
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by mawwy | [ Reply to This ]
      there is nothing in this world that could bring these heroes back but only memories. fighting for what's right is all that matters. I knew what you were trying to say from the start and i feel u. people take granted of people of uniform and what they do everyday. regardless of what country, religion or race...when they wear that uniform, they honour an Oath. To misuse and misguide wearing that uniform is a sin and shameful to the Oath taken. Some followed orders and some did what was right. I salute to these fallen heroes and the ones who are alive. Just by wearing a uniform, you are already a hero in my eyes. My prayers to all.

    ~mawwy~
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by mawwy | [ Reply to This ]
      there is nothing in this world that could bring these heroes back but only memories. fighting for what's right is all that matters. I knew what you were trying to say from the start and i feel u. people take granted of people of uniform and what they do everyday. regardless of what country, religion or race...when they wear that uniform, they honour an Oath. To misuse and misguide wearing that uniform is a sin and shameful to the Oath taken. Some followed orders and some did what was right. I salute to these fallen heroes and the ones who are alive. Just by wearing a uniform, you are already a hero in my eyes. My prayers to all.

    ~mawwy~
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by mawwy | [ Reply to This ]
      baby,

    this is really touching and sometimes it is hard to get your point across...and some people don't know that the simple freedoms that they have are being fought for somewhere else with someone else's life at stake,and they just see it as give and take...but when it hits home its a blow fortold...because you did try to warn them about being so bold
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, that is so true, everday there are people out there protecting us and sometimes we don't even know it, this was a good write, i think you expressed yourself well, and the message was good, nice job. - latykim
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by latykim | [ Reply to This ]
      touching stuff, i really think that this peice should be read slowly, the structure tells you that, its a very proud and very morbid truth to it, beautiful heartfelt words i think. colour difference is a tender subject and its left alone too much i think.
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by outsider | [ Reply to This ]


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