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    Author: Butterfly Bullets
    ASL Info:    24/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 188/257/24
    Words: 291
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 1611
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    Tonight we have some new ammunition
    Weíre waiting for bullets to hit our hearts
    Itís high school all over weíre sixteen again
    And the world is falling apart

    Youíre so optimistic it makes me sick
    You always say youíre falling in and out of love
    Where do I fit in to this addiction
    The one where the gun is the drug

    This is for all the good times we never had
    All the wasted words that we canít take back
    All the nights I spent holding on to you

    This is for the girl next door that I never met
    All the romance that I never got to regret
    All the nights I spent dying over you

    Can this smile be much more artificial
    Can your kiss be less of an invitation
    Can you say goodbye without an excuse
    Remember to use a vertical laceration

    Graveyards and the overpass are waiting for my heart to crash
    But you donít hear a single word I say
    I was missing you like oxygen, I needed you here like you were then
    But now I wish you would just go away

    This is for all the good times we never had
    All the wasted words that we canít take back
    All the nights I spent holding on to you

    This is for the girl next door that I never met
    All the romance that I never got to regret
    All the nights I spent dying over you

    Do you remember that last shining star
    Keeping us together no matter how far we are
    Itís burning out bright tonight
    Giving up without a fight
    All in all lending a hand
    Just to fall out of sight




    Submitted on 2004-09-03 02:32:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow.. this one it like hits home for me in so many places..it jus makes me stop wut im doin n truly think .. which is hard for me right now cuz im over tired

    Graveyards and the overpass are waiting for my heart to crash
    But you donít hear a single word I say
    I was missing you like oxygen, I needed you here like you were then
    But now I wish you would just go away

    that was truly my favorite stanza..it jus sums up how i feel right now.<33ash
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Like oxygen... the very air you breathe... drop me a line and tell me how this turned out, would you? I feel like I have come to know you... Your story is so much like mine in ways, save the fact you are older and much, MUCH more talented... "To find out she's not that great"... heh... yeah. Beautiful write. I am sorry that I cannot offer any thing to help you... constructive criticism or something, but your writes are simply perfect... Virgil
    | Posted on 2004-11-24 00:00:00 | by Lip_Gloss_and_Black | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the descriptions you have in this. they paint an interesting picture in my head.

    "Graveyards and the overpass are waiting for my heart to crash
    But you donít hear a single word I say
    I was missing you like oxygen, I needed you here like you were then
    But now I wish you would just go away"

    i love these lines. they really bring your theme together. they say exactly what your description does but with that poetic edge we all love. good work.
    | Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by painfullyme | [ Reply to This ]
      I can say I've been through this before. And it SUCKS. Ekkkk But I am 16 and still in high school so it'll more and likely happen again. I really enjoy your lyrics. You bring depth and a different feel to just regular lyrics. Great job.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't really say I've come across the dilemma in your description but these lyrics are the best I've read yet from you. Loads went into them and result was perfect. Several parts in this just left me speechless.

    Where do I fit in to this addiction
    The one where the gun is the drug

    This is for the girl next door that I never met
    All the romance that I never got to regret
    All the nights I spent dying over you

    Great work, man!
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bro, this is brent. i gotta say man, i really like your style. everything was reminiscent, and built up to the last stanza, which is one of the more tragic and sad endings i have heard lately. i got a sense of pain from this piece, your works always get me right there anyway, there was this one girl, that lived in havre de grace in maryland, don't know if you have ever been there, but your writings bring back so many memories of her and what transpired between us, it was sad man, she ripped my heart out, but i know why she had to...i'm a Marine dude, and she needed someone to be there at all times. thanks man. i think our styles are a little similar, our maybe the way we feel or write about our emotions you know? take care bro.
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      such anguish and frustration!!*raises an eyebrow* it's fabulous! i got to agree with Miss Amber, this piece was done with emotions and it turned out to be a well-done piece. hmmm, my story is that i have a friend who actually stalks me, people say he worships me (which of course is scary) he is sweet but he wasn't doing it right...1st the stalks then he insisted to people that i was his gf. lol of course i had to talk to him about this...some say i'm crazy to do this but i'd rather ask and tell him what's going on between us, b4 he hurts himself or people around him. lol my gurls say he had MAD LOVE for me. which i am flattered. i am humbled by these stituations as i am after reading your piece. well-met once again.

    ~mawwy~
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by mawwy | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude a masterpiece of feeling has been made and it was of your doing! I loved this. I can hear the music behind it. Anyhow this one is going on my favorites because I loved this and it hit home for me becaue I have felt strong feelings for a guy that turned out to be a total loser. Did I mention he was my best friend and I loved him for 10 years? haha.. that was a HUGE waste of my thoughts! oh well! Again excellent! au revoir!
    ~*~amber~*~
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]


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