First in Line to Be Last -------------------------------------------
Tonight we have some new ammunition
We’re waiting for bullets to hit our hearts
It’s high school all over we’re sixteen again
And the world is falling apart
You’re so optimistic it makes me sick
You always say you’re falling in and out of love
Where do I fit in to this addiction
The one where the gun is the drug
This is for all the good times we never had
All the wasted words that we can’t take back
All the nights I spent holding on to you
This is for the girl next door that I never met
All the romance that I never got to regret
All the nights I spent dying over you
Can this smile be much more artificial
Can your kiss be less of an invitation
Can you say goodbye without an excuse
Remember to use a vertical laceration
Graveyards and the overpass are waiting for my heart to crash
But you don’t hear a single word I say
I was missing you like oxygen, I needed you here like you were then
But now I wish you would just go away
This is for all the good times we never had
All the wasted words that we can’t take back
All the nights I spent holding on to you
This is for the girl next door that I never met
All the romance that I never got to regret
All the nights I spent dying over you
Do you remember that last shining star
Keeping us together no matter how far we are
It’s burning out bright tonight
Giving up without a fight
All in all lending a hand
Just to fall out of sight
wow.. this one it like hits home for me in so many places..it jus makes me stop wut im doin n truly think .. which is hard for me right now cuz im over tired
Graveyards and the overpass are waiting for my heart to crash But you don’t hear a single word I say I was missing you like oxygen, I needed you here like you were then But now I wish you would just go away
that was truly my favorite stanza..it jus sums up how i feel right now.<33ash
Like oxygen... the very air you breathe... drop me a line and tell me how this turned out, would you? I feel like I have come to know you... Your story is so much like mine in ways, save the fact you are older and much, MUCH more talented... "To find out she's not that great"... heh... yeah. Beautiful write. I am sorry that I cannot offer any thing to help you... constructive criticism or something, but your writes are simply perfect... Virgil
i like the descriptions you have in this. they paint an interesting picture in my head.
"Graveyards and the overpass are waiting for my heart to crash But you don’t hear a single word I say I was missing you like oxygen, I needed you here like you were then But now I wish you would just go away"
i love these lines. they really bring your theme together. they say exactly what your description does but with that poetic edge we all love. good work.
I can say I've been through this before. And it SUCKS. Ekkkk But I am 16 and still in high school so it'll more and likely happen again. I really enjoy your lyrics. You bring depth and a different feel to just regular lyrics. Great job. -blt
I can't really say I've come across the dilemma in your description but these lyrics are the best I've read yet from you. Loads went into them and result was perfect. Several parts in this just left me speechless.
Where do I fit in to this addiction The one where the gun is the drug
This is for the girl next door that I never met All the romance that I never got to regret All the nights I spent dying over you
hey bro, this is brent. i gotta say man, i really like your style. everything was reminiscent, and built up to the last stanza, which is one of the more tragic and sad endings i have heard lately. i got a sense of pain from this piece, your works always get me right there anyway, there was this one girl, that lived in havre de grace in maryland, don't know if you have ever been there, but your writings bring back so many memories of her and what transpired between us, it was sad man, she ripped my heart out, but i know why she had to...i'm a Marine dude, and she needed someone to be there at all times. thanks man. i think our styles are a little similar, our maybe the way we feel or write about our emotions you know? take care bro.
such anguish and frustration!!*raises an eyebrow* it's fabulous! i got to agree with Miss Amber, this piece was done with emotions and it turned out to be a well-done piece. hmmm, my story is that i have a friend who actually stalks me, people say he worships me (which of course is scary) he is sweet but he wasn't doing it right...1st the stalks then he insisted to people that i was his gf. lol of course i had to talk to him about this...some say i'm crazy to do this but i'd rather ask and tell him what's going on between us, b4 he hurts himself or people around him. lol my gurls say he had MAD LOVE for me. which i am flattered. i am humbled by these stituations as i am after reading your piece. well-met once again.
Dude a masterpiece of feeling has been made and it was of your doing! I loved this. I can hear the music behind it. Anyhow this one is going on my favorites because I loved this and it hit home for me becaue I have felt strong feelings for a guy that turned out to be a total loser. Did I mention he was my best friend and I loved him for 10 years? haha.. that was a HUGE waste of my thoughts! oh well! Again excellent! au revoir! ~*~amber~*~
Submission Name: First in Line to Be Last
Virgil 
