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    dots Submission Name: Even If You Don't Knowdots
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    Author: Butterfly Bullets
    ASL Info:    24/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 188/257/24
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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    dotsEven If You Don't Knowdots
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    I just wanna wake up with you by my side....
    and if you're not there I want to keep sleeping so I can dream of you.
    When I'm in the shower I wanna hear you laugh at the TV so I can smile to myself and say "I love her".
    I wanna see the pouty face and puppy eyes when we go to the store and they don't have your favorite jelly beans.
    I wanna watch you run around in your underwear in the morning while you do your hair and make up.
    I wanna hold your hair back when the liquor gets to you.
    I wanna take stupid pictures of us with our friends at the bar on your 21st.
    I wanna make everything that ever hurt you go away.
    And even if you don't know I exist.......
    I wanna hold your hand when it rains.




    Submitted on 2004-09-03 02:36:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      aw i found this sweet.. what girl wouldnt want this.. you captured it so well.. n no i dont think it reads like a stalker note.. theres nothing stalkerish about it..
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      That such a bond exists between human beings blows my mind, even though I have been part of one. It is such a deep understanding and brings about a peace beyond peace. Your random thoughts are just as beautiful and poetic as your lyrics. May you find happiness, my friend. Virgil
    | Posted on 2004-11-24 00:00:00 | by Lip_Gloss_and_Black | [ Reply to This ]
      This is such a close look into the heart of a guy... something that guys rarely show. I'm so glad that you wrote this and let us read it. It wuz amazing, you just spill your heart out and the page drinks it up, and so do your readers. I'm just starting to read your stuff... I saw one of your other poems on a fave list and had to check it out. Dude I'm so glad I did, you give me inspiration. Is that corny? You're great. Oh... did anything happen with your friend??
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]
      that is the most beautiful thing i have ever read. i am for once speechless. it takes a lot to take my words away. i would kill to have someone write that about me.

    unbelievably powerful!
    | Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by painfullyme | [ Reply to This ]
      yep...this is why we're all saying...'is he taken'
    your so pure of emotion...it's raw and clear..it make the heart want to leap from the chest and fly the heavens...
    beautiful, very touching...
    she's a very lucky girl...and vise versa i see
    cool
    kelly
    | Posted on 2004-10-04 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont want to echo all the awwws that you've already gotten here but it's hard not to.
    this so perfectly sums up that way it feels to be in love... i love the attention to the little details.. the things that people usually take for granted when they're in a relationship. but the one line that stood out more than anything at all was:
    "When I'm in the shower I wanna hear you laugh at the TV so I can smile to myself and say "I love her"... there;s something about that .. i've tried to describe why that was my favourite line and for the past ten minutes.. i havent been able to come up with anything that does it justice.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww. This girl must be special. Have you ever let her know how much you feel for her? I love this. Its everything a girl could want. I particularly like the line "and if you're not there I want to keep sleeping so I can dream of you." Its crazy how we can constantly have one person on our minds, and have them continually run through our heads. Everyday, all day.
    -Andrya
    | Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      Whats the deal with everyone saying 'awwwww' a lot of time to fill out the comment box? Pathetic if you ask me. Anyway, this was a great write and it goes to show that random thoughts aren't always a bad thing. I used to think that writes like this wouldn't get turned down, but now I'm not so sure.
    | Posted on 2004-09-12 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      *sniffle sniffle* Very adorable. Very sweet. Very thoughtful. The girl that you wrote this about is very lucky. This is so awesome. Awwww! (Had to do that!)
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      I now just how it feels dude...Your piece just took everything Ive bene thinking about the past month and gave it focus. ITs rough be head over heels for a friend, I know for me I am cursed by being thought of the older brother. I gotta say eventhough you stated these were just random toughts, they flow well, and I think by writing about such simple act as you did speaks alot of your admiration for her. Everyone wants someone they can care for. Good write I hope it works out for ya,-John
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]
      omg wow.. lol. i do love this. its beatuiful/swet and everything else. its sweet. keep up the good work.. lol these faces crack me up. lmfao ...
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by natasha | [ Reply to This ]
      this was so sweet...dude ...i love the part about the shower and how you want to hear her laugh it just so real...i cant think of a better word to describe it...its sweet and truthful...the whole write is...i think thats why i like it...and i see in your description that your still in love with her so i'm guessing it didn't go that well...i have to admit if a guy said these things to me...lol...i'd wanna be with him...and your cute too...if thats your pic up there...though only problem i found with this write is...the format...it would read more freely in a diffrent form...but besides that i enjoyed it...ange
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwwwwwww. . .awwwwwwwww. . .awwwwwww. . .It's so sweet. Awwwwwww. . .What did she say. . .Nobody could turn such a sweet proposition down. It's so sweet. . .Awwwwwwww. . .
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by Raineyes | [ Reply to This ]
      your so damn gorgeous... i hope she didnt turn you down with random thoughts like these... i started reading the shower bit and prejudged it before i got to the end of it and was thinking how trashy it was but please forgive me already... thats the most gorgeous thing i think ive ever read (or can think of right now...) and i kinda liked the end of the poem... a kinda attempt to not let you get your hopes up just in case but i very firm i wanna be the one to dance with you in the rain kinda thing... oh your so great! ciao butterfly bullets boy!
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      *flutters eyelashes* awwwwwww.
    This one touched me. Whoever that girl is, she should know u exist. Lol i know its easier said than done but you'll never know and there's always the question " What IF..." yea the fear of losing but it takes courage to step up to the plate kind sir. *smiles* i know that most gurls when they read this piece they'll wonder, is there a guy out there somewhere who feels like you do. Admiring them from a distance. i simply loved it, sweet and honest.

    ~mawwy~
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by mawwy | [ Reply to This ]
      Can we say awwwwwww? How adorable is that? Did you let her read this? Eh she might not be one of those girls that falls for this kinda stuff. I have a mind like that sometimes but this got to me. The end sealed the deal . I was like umm dude how freakin sweet can this poem be? I hope something good happens with you and your friend! Good luck!
    ~*~amber~*~
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]


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