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    dots Submission Name: unristabledots
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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1131
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 581



    Description:
       a new word from a friend... lol i know spelling is bad but meh.. i came up with this


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    dotsunristabledots
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    your touch,
    ur kiss,
    ur lips i cant resist.
    your smile ,
    your eyes.
    always looking in mine.
    im falling for you and i cant resist.
    loveing you is all i know how to do.

    the letters,
    the calls.
    walks down the halls.
    me in your arms..
    what a life.

    the fights
    the crys
    the tears,
    there mine.
    you pull me close
    and wont let go.

    you love me.
    and i love you.
    nothing more we can do.
    its unristable.




    Submitted on 2004-09-03 11:50:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Whoa, you pretty much touched on the feelings of a million other people in love. Or maybe just me, eh. Every stanza had a continious pace and the last lines ended them well. I did notice that the first stanza was longer than the rest, but you shouldn't worry about that, everything works were it's at. Nice write
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by Aj | [ Reply to This ]


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