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    dots Submission Name: First Taskdots

    Author: ibelikeso
    ASL Info:    27/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 119/106/24
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       if you ever wonder about the one up above...think abotu this... your firts task.

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    dotsFirst Taskdots

    There are no words that limit
    There is no boundary or even a scrimmage

    For you have freedom in God
    Because you were made in his image

    He was your first love
    His magesty you adorn

    He loved you so much
    Even before you were born

    So what else can i say
    I guess you were in danger

    Of not knowing God
    He is your dad, not a stranger

    How often do you whisper
    Soft things in his ears

    He loves you so much
    He even shead blood and tears

    So you could be by his side
    While he shows you what is right

    He wants me to tell you
    He protects you at night

    Even throughout the days
    To you safety he brings

    He will send you an angel
    Who will caress you with wings

    These are the secrets
    He has asked me to scream

    Every time i meet someone special
    That come close to his dream

    He said, "To show me you love me,
    Just do what i ask"

    To love him so purely
    Will be your first task

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    this was really good...I'm glad you are in touch with Christ in this way...and you know that he will hold you up for a brighter day.
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      aww... sweet and simple message. Flowed well, very pastoral (I meant in the literary sense!) Just curious- what branch of Christianity are you?

    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the last two lines they are really very unique. it is a very well writen poem and very smooth.

    are you trying to give a massege through this poem?
    good job
    | Posted on 2004-09-03 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]

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