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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       this is my friends poem.. i love it. its sad and makes me want to cry. Hes a close fried of mine ad this is a poem about his ex that he stillloves. i will show more of his poems after i finsh reading them all. thanks. xoxxoxoox hope ya like it xooxoxooxox


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    Now lately I've been walkin the halls, fake smiles of course
    Mah girls sayin she loves me but wants a divorce
    This shits eating my alive inside, every night I've cried
    Being faithful but she thinks I creep, real life beauty and the beast
    I aint never been so soft, never felt so alone, never grown
    Since she started thinkin that she'd be better off alone
    Was it somethin' I forgot to supply? One too many lies?
    Did I harrass her with one too many, " I can't say goodbyes"
    Now shes quoting the rhyme I wrote her
    I Love Her, I wanna show her
    But this shits killin me, silence on the phone
    I had plans to just show up at her home
    But she just kept pushing me, I just couldnt take it
    I knew we'd always make it, but never thought she'd fake it
    I dont know what to do, if she picks up and leaves
    Findin it hard to breathe, don't wanna turn into the old me

    But can't resort to that 'cause I'm tryna practice what I preach
    Honesty, loyalty, faithfulness, shit you can't teach
    Tears hittin' the pillow 'cause we aint as strong as before
    Buncha Jagged Edge tunes, wish you could hear these songs sung
    But I know we in it for the long run




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