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What You've Done


Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 70
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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Another very hard piece for me to write. Very taxing emotionally. I said before that i wanted to go beyond him and forgive, but right now... all i feel is loss and anger. I found that it's easy to hate someone, but things become so much more difficult when you want so badly to love them too....


What You've Done



I can't believe you've done this-
Taken what was rightly mine.
After your cruelty you replace your mask
& pretend everything is just fine.
Head of the chrurch...
You fucking glory whore;
We return from your beloved church
Only to violate me more.
I hate you for what you made me.
But even worse than that-
I've tried so hard to love you
After you've forced me where i'm at.




Submitted on 2004-02-23 10:11:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  definately one of your emotional powerhouses. your very good at raging. i wont go into the use of metaphors. lets just say, i hope writing this helped you
| Posted on 2004-02-23 00:00:00 | by love gone wrong | [ Reply to This ]
  Good poem. Take out just in line 4 and correct chrurch in line 5. You've got a poem with alot of emotion. Well written.
| Posted on 2004-02-23 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
  full of emotion.. it seems church is a metaphor for a hglier than thou type person? there seems to be only one or two things missing... what did he take, and at the end, where did he leave you? I would add a couple of lines to that effect... but this works as well, for those who like to think what is missing, as if it isnt obvious... nice one, full of emotion and imagery... keep em coming... nice write
| Posted on 2004-02-23 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]


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