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    dots Submission Name: I willdots
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    Author: slybee22
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    5.59 - 93/64/27
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
    Total Views: 443
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 524



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    dots I willdots
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    Every time you ignore me is a reason for me to be heard.

    Every time you knock me down and put emotional lashes on my back, is a reason for me to get up and show that I am capable.

    Every time you let me down is a reason for me to stand on my own two feet.

    Every time you lose control is a reason for me to take control and shield my heart.

    I will make it out of this hell I was born into.

    I know it, because you give me a different reason every time.




    Submitted on 2004-09-04 11:06:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey here I am fulfilling my promise. this is a nice poem. I do relate to it, like everybody else does. I like the message in your poem and I like your strength hidden in your words. The flow of your poem is good. you have chosen the correct words, it is a very strong piece. I think there are a lot of emotions in this poem and that makes the reader difficult not to like it.

    I will make it out of this hell I was born into.

    I know it, because you give me a different reason every time.

    These are my favourite lines, the ending of the poem is perfect.
    with love shabnam
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt this was a strong piece...the repetition can get tiresome but the piece isn't long enough for that to be too much of a concern.

    last line...maybe

    I do not doubt it, for I have every reason to believe?

    Something like that with a twist so that the poem ends as powerfully as it can.

    food for thought.

    Enjoyed the strength in this piece
    | Posted on 2004-12-15 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Very relatable. We all have someone in our lives that seem to drag us down, and make us feel so worthless. I admire the fact that in the poem you seemed to rise above it, not letting anyone bring you down... I respect that. You just do what you do, make something of yourself, [censored] anyone else.

    Nice write
    | Posted on 2004-09-04 00:00:00 | by Ang | [ Reply to This ]
      Im glad your getting something out of it. Although its a horrible feeling for someone to treat you like you dont deserve. But atleast your becoming something from it.
    | Posted on 2004-09-04 00:00:00 | by xnever_alonex | [ Reply to This ]
      hrm. people suck don't they...good luck even though you don't need it. just keep believing in yourself and do what you do best...and it will get you somewhere higher than they are...
    | Posted on 2004-09-04 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]



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