Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Strength of Eaglesdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: colopoao
    ASL Info:    42/ Male / Hallowell Mai
    Elite Ratio:    4.89 - 62/55/18
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1158
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1006



    Description:
       I am a serious writer who enjoys the art of creating an image with words. Poetry is a beautiful way to express those images and feelings.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsStrength of Eaglesdots
    -------------------------------------------


    The Strength of Eagles

    To the men and women who are helping to protect Freedom. Thank you.

    Majestic and Proud
    A wingspan of six feet...
    Eyes reflect the purity
    Of heroes

    Marching to Virginia
    Winning the civil war

    The current remembers...
    Those that once loved
    Once yearning for a

    Better Tomorrow.....

    The current remembers...
    A reflection.....
    A glimmer.....
    A Hope.....

    A reflection that....
    sometimes can be blackened
    By the darkest mud

    Only to be purified by
    The coolest rain.....


    by colopoao

    Author's Comments:
    "I was watching a bald eagle fly past me from across the river of my home town. It made me think of the men who served in the civil war days and traveled from this same town to help win freedom. Hope you enjoy it. "




    Submitted on 2004-09-04 18:28:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Caught some errors for you
    Forth line of the first stanza, it's "heroes"
    Last line third stanza, the word in "yearning"
    besides that, thereisn't i any advice i can give you on this piece because it was very well written. Inpirational. I bet the Men and Women in arms would really appreciate this.
    Aken Sol
    | Posted on 2004-09-09 00:00:00 | by Aken Sol | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    23148

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Carry written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The World written by jjd
    Cover written by saartha
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Still Perfectly Flawed written by armand
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry