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    dots Submission Name: Strength of Eaglesdots
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    Author: colopoao
    ASL Info:    42/ Male / Hallowell Mai
    Elite Ratio:    4.89 - 62/55/18
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1133
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       I am a serious writer who enjoys the art of creating an image with words. Poetry is a beautiful way to express those images and feelings.


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    dotsStrength of Eaglesdots
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    The Strength of Eagles

    To the men and women who are helping to protect Freedom. Thank you.

    Majestic and Proud
    A wingspan of six feet...
    Eyes reflect the purity
    Of heroes

    Marching to Virginia
    Winning the civil war

    The current remembers...
    Those that once loved
    Once yearning for a

    Better Tomorrow.....

    The current remembers...
    A reflection.....
    A glimmer.....
    A Hope.....

    A reflection that....
    sometimes can be blackened
    By the darkest mud

    Only to be purified by
    The coolest rain.....


    by colopoao

    Author's Comments:
    "I was watching a bald eagle fly past me from across the river of my home town. It made me think of the men who served in the civil war days and traveled from this same town to help win freedom. Hope you enjoy it. "




    Submitted on 2004-09-04 18:28:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Caught some errors for you
    Forth line of the first stanza, it's "heroes"
    Last line third stanza, the word in "yearning"
    besides that, thereisn't i any advice i can give you on this piece because it was very well written. Inpirational. I bet the Men and Women in arms would really appreciate this.
    Aken Sol
    | Posted on 2004-09-09 00:00:00 | by Aken Sol | [ Reply to This ]


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