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    dots Submission Name: caught up in your eyes:dots
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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 678
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 445



    Description:
       i just made this. and i like it so for all of u who dont i dont care.


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    dotscaught up in your eyes:dots
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    look at me im all giddy. smillying endlessly.
    loveing you loveing me. ive never felted so free.
    im caught up when i look at you looking at me.
    looking at u, never could get mad.
    you holding me and makeing me laugh.
    I came to u with questions i needed to be answerd
    and just looked in your eyes. I couldnt tell if they were lies.
    I was on your side.
    im all caught up , dreaming of you.




    Submitted on 2004-09-04 21:15:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      L2- 'loveing'- loving
    L2- 'felted'- felt
    L5- 'makeing'- making
    L6- 'answerd'- answered

    only a few spelling mistakes, i only point them out cos u can correct them ded easily if u wnt. I liked it.
    | Posted on 2004-09-04 00:00:00 | by outsider | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel this all the time... or atleast I did, were now just friends so i have to hide my feelings. But its nice. Even though u just made it up lol
    | Posted on 2004-09-04 00:00:00 | by xnever_alonex | [ Reply to This ]


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