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    dots Submission Name: The Moon of Wheredots
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    Author: Poechick13
    ASL Info:    16/f/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 42/59/22
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Moon of Wheredots
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    When I was young, I stumbled Where,
    I found a fainted flower there.
    It held the beauty of the night;
    Sprouted wings and then took flight.
    I looked up high and saw the moon.
    I heard a hardly aural tune.

    When time was now, I stumbled Where.
    I found no fainted flower there.
    Still the beauty of the night.
    I looked down, then to the sky
    I honored so the blook red moon.
    Whose fate is now, discord is strewn.

    Late that night I thought of Where.
    And what had taken place in there.
    My room filled with the moonlight.
    I saw it change to red from white.
    Beheld everything in my room;
    Thus dissipate into the doom.

    Quickly I thought; the fate of Where,
    And what had taken place in there.
    Why all things positive did die.
    How the moon was red, not white.
    I now felt that my time was soon.
    I'm ending now from the blood red moon




    Submitted on 2004-09-04 22:53:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Bravo! I liked this poem. You have an original idea and expressed it very thoroughly. I think we all have our own personal place that can be called "Where". Also, great symbolism from the softer, sweeter tone of the flower to the finale with the blood red moon. Kudos to ya!
    | Posted on 2004-09-07 00:00:00 | by hushedhavoc | [ Reply to This ]
      its a good poem and what makes it interesting is the twist you gave to the ending. at first the flower touch made it seem realy nice, but then as i read about the moon changing from white to red...it made me think twice. good wording.
    hope to read more from you!
    | Posted on 2004-09-05 00:00:00 | by ibelikeso | [ Reply to This ]



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