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    dots Submission Name: so many thoughts:dots
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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 263
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 571



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       i wrote this from the top of my head


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    dotsso many thoughts:dots
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    so many thoughts run threw my head. not knowing why things
    are lefted un said.
    hearts are breaking were both crying.
    i cant take it... i wanna kiss you but scarred to.
    so mant thoughtd run threw my head.
    I would die to know that you love me.
    plz plz forgive me...
    i dont want to end this way.
    why cant i just say what i want to say?
    here you are with ur hands in your hand ,
    im scarred to fuck up. so my heads on your shoulder.
    so many tohughts run threw my head. and yet your still hear.




    Submitted on 2004-09-05 10:09:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't find too much in this that draws me to read on...it's mainly because it seems to have been said before. I found the spelling/grammar to be a problem...just chuck it in microsoft word before you post...helps eliminate errors. Good luck with this.
    | Posted on 2004-09-05 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem has good content, some of the lines could maybe do with some reshuffling, but that your deal. You maybe wanna go re-edit as there are a few spelling mistakes. But I like it. Well done. Beckie
    | Posted on 2004-09-05 00:00:00 | by Burnt Rose | [ Reply to This ]



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