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    dots Submission Name: Your Smile Warms Medots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsYour Smile Warms Medots
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    Your smile warms me
    like a jar of fireflies
    shatters the darkness
    in an isolated campground.
    To hear you speak is like a choir
    breaking a deaf man's silence.
    Making love to you
    revives my numb body
    Aand rebirths my soul.





    Submitted on 2004-09-06 03:28:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      there are some great images here, the fireflies in the isolated campground... i wouldn't mind being there right now, to be honest with you... oh, the poem, yeah... really truly this is a great love poem. that must be some mighty choir to break a deaf man's silence! i heard a choir like that in the cathedral in seattle, and i thought i'd died and gone to heaven! truly! oh, and that picture of you... dance on, mama! you look both tough and sexy!
    | Posted on 2004-09-06 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      YUM! this is gorgeous... i especially adore the part about the breaking of a deaf mans silence... sounds so magic... like... yeah... i fully cant explain it but fully wow! awesome write!
    | Posted on 2004-09-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      love is powerful. it's a great little love poem. your comparisons fit perfectly and are very vivid. nothing to criticize here.
    | Posted on 2004-09-06 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      well in all seriousness, this poem was a decent poem...I enjoyed it it alot and found that my favorite line was the whole deaf man line...everyone knows what kind of choir makes a deaf man hear...right? and as far as the grossing out contest goes..YOU WIN HANDS DOWN too much info here folks, I'd raise your hand but...no. Thanks for the poem it was worth my reply.
    | Posted on 2004-09-06 00:00:00 | by SKillz_Heckle | [ Reply to This ]
      isn't love grand, i was tell some one today just that, that love is grand. i like this it's very cute, and sort and to the point.

    Milo STills
    | Posted on 2004-09-06 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]


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