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    dots Submission Name: Twisted:dots
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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       this is nothing.. just a poem i wrote with the word twisted


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    dotsTwisted:dots
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    shes twisted in side, screaming , thinking and cant handle it anymore.
    she doesnt know what she did to decive you so.
    crying cuting abuseing hurting, .
    shes bleeding.
    shes twisted inside and out. and doesnt know what its all about.
    She cant help him she cant even help her self.
    no wonder she cuts her self.




    Submitted on 2004-09-06 18:06:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i thought this was a very expressive and emmotional piece, but cutting!
    this seems like a love piece where he's not talking to you and you don't know why, and you like him and it's burning you inside. well that's what i think, good write.

    P.S - don't cut yourself
    | Posted on 2004-09-06 00:00:00 | by latykim | [ Reply to This ]
      Cutting sucks...

    anyway... nice work turning a word into a short little poem, always a good writing excercize. Work on that spell check.

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2004-09-06 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      self mutilation is a terrible choice in solving ones problems, they leave scars that remind you daily of the pain you have felt and the pain that you have inflicted upon yourself. You obviously have talent as a upcoming writer, I hope you continue to do so, I like the emotional expressions, but make sure to check your spelling before posting, have a great day...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-09-06 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]


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