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    dots Submission Name: Spinning in circles:dots
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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 751
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    Bytes: 422



    Description:
       its about a gurl falling in love


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    dotsSpinning in circles:dots
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    as a little child runs in circles her her laugh her her fall.
    this is what my heart feels like,
    im in ur arms not wanting to be let go,
    im sppining in cirles, falling head over heels and its
    for you im so sure.
    hear her heart, speak her mind.
    shes falling for this guy.
    spinnig in cirlces going threw ups and downs.
    loveing it all, look whats shes found




    Submitted on 2004-09-07 12:42:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      pretty cool offering considering your age...I enjoyed it. pop it in microsoft word as a proof reader before posting?
    | Posted on 2004-09-07 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      wow its vivid! i see her spinning in circles!... i like it because its more about a new beginning than and end! hope to see more poems that can feel like there ae good things in your life! andy
    | Posted on 2004-09-07 00:00:00 | by ibelikeso | [ Reply to This ]


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