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    dots Submission Name: My goddessdots

    Author: Jonathan Ryner
    ASL Info:    41 Male Round Rock, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 12/14/10
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    This is about keeping to one's promise in spite of intense, longing desires.

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    dotsMy goddessdots

    How to hold thee I do ache,

    yet by my promise I do wait,

    shall I die by my passion's constraint?

    Then shall I go with ne'er a complaint,

    but to see thee by morning's light,

    would make all troubles seem but trite,

    and to touch thine face during the morning dew

    would be as a dream held true.

    Jonathan Ryner

    2004 Jonathan Ryner

    Submitted on 2004-09-07 23:04:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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