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    dots Submission Name: My Heart is Yoursdots
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    Author: Jonathan Ryner
    ASL Info:    41 Male Round Rock, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 12/14/10
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Prose/Passion
    Total Views: 804
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    Description:
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    This is about the assurance of a lady of my heart.


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    dotsMy Heart is Yoursdots
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    My arms will be your comforter, take them
    for your shoulders to keep you warm,

    My eyes are your window into my soul, take
    them for your mind that you will know
    how much i love you,

    My heart is your shield, take it, be
    protected and strong with the knowledge
    that it will never dent or bend and will be
    in your grasp even as you reach for it.

    My mind is your sword, take it, and let me
    fight for you, direct me, and i will be
    there to smite those who would harm you.

    I am yours, to warm you, to love you, to
    protect you, and to war for you.

    You are my goddess and that is all I need.

    Jonathan Ryner

    2004 Jonathan Ryner




    Submitted on 2004-09-07 23:10:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cute poem nice & direct! Soft on the eyes & mind ;) Something I hope to read a sequel to keep it up & stay safe! Bye! Darn I have to write more! I liked the last line thats cute!
    | Posted on 2004-09-08 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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