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    dots Submission Name: Revenge!dots
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    Author: Rainmaker
    ASL Info:    23 / M / Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.84 - 45/50/19
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
    Total Views: 998
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 830



    Description:
       This is kinda test for metal lyrics that are very very simple to sing and understand, all are coming with a shout and fast and striking. Thats why there are so few words per line. Try to shout it out the melody aint that important in this one, i was thinking about some heavy saw simple e0 e0 e0 e0 etc. bass riff with speeding in the very end of every line. And some double bass drum with some hihat etc. Simple but still rushing style.


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    dotsRevenge!dots
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    Can we?
    Protect!
    This land
    Of ours!

    Blood!
    Fear!
    Pain!
    All the same!

    It is
    The end of all love
    To die
    In fight

    Can we?
    Endure!
    This hatred
    Of enemy!

    Blood!
    Fear!
    Pain!
    All the same!

    It is!
    Gone with the wind
    Smoke 'n fire!
    Destruction! ( 'rings' long )

    Blood!
    Fear!
    Pain!
    All the same

    Homeland!
    Gone by treason!
    Of allies!
    REVENGE! ( long shout )

    It is
    The end of all love
    To fight
    for revenge!

    Revenge!!

    Revenge!!

    (repeated many times and fading away)




    Submitted on 2004-09-08 06:52:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can definetly see heavyness and shouting in this. Great angst song. Strong guitar, heavy bass very, very fast. kick ass drum part.
    | Posted on 2004-09-08 00:00:00 | by Kapone | [ Reply to This ]
      This looks like it would be a pretty energetic song....given that you are from Finland your English is pretty good. 'to fight to die'? 'of enemies'? Pretty catchy and looks like it would have a strong sound....a bit short though? Enjoyed
    | Posted on 2004-09-08 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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