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    dots Submission Name: Melancholiadots
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    Author: Jonathan Ryner
    ASL Info:    41 Male Round Rock, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 12/14/10
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Prose/Dark
    Total Views: 735
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       I put myself in a pretty dark mood for this one.

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    dotsMelancholiadots
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    A land, so sad.
    So dark
    alone.
    Lonliness is the King,
    at his side, his Queen,
    Misery.
    Only the damned inhabit
    this darkness.
    The walls are of granite
    tall stark and black
    Clouds in heaven are swirling
    masses of darkness,
    threatening to collapse upon
    this unwholesome land.


    Jonathan D. Ryner

    2004 Jonathan D. Ryner




    Submitted on 2004-09-09 00:17:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very dark and creepy. . . makes me shiver inside and want to go lay down in a big humongous pool of liquid sunlight. I can just see heavy, layered clouds hanging over an already shadowed kingdom, mumbling with far-off but coming-closer thunder of impending doom. Interesting.
    -Secret
    | Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a nice poem...I particularly liked how you had "alone" and "misery" on their own lines, thus bringing a greater emphasis. For some odd reason the clouds make me think of Kansas in the Wizard of Oz...hmm, bet that one's just me though. Write on!
    | Posted on 2004-09-09 00:00:00 | by hushedhavoc | [ Reply to This ]
      Why u talking about my home in public! lol just kidding I like t5his one, it's worth saving cause! Great job keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-09-09 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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