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    dots Submission Name: then and nowdots

    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I wrote this day before yesterday, while thinking of my fiance who is off at medical school

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    dotsthen and nowdots

    I remember
    Just like it was yesterday
    The way it felt the first time
    That you smiled at me
    Blue eyes
    A metal necklace
    And a two-toned blue shirt
    I chose a seat
    Next to you
    My heart beat in my throat
    And I knew then
    That I wanted you always
    Your face next to mine
    Every morning
    When I wake up
    Your lips kissing me always
    To take you to my bed
    My first time there
    And on every trip thereafter
    And then you were there
    Kissing me
    Smiling at me
    And we went into my bedroom
    Where you were the first
    To explore my secrets
    And you layed with me
    We were one
    Then you moved
    You and I still talked
    Still kissed and layed together
    When we got to see each other
    And now you've moved again
    Further away
    I miss your voice
    And your kisses and love
    And now I can't let you go
    I tasted forever
    Snatched away
    By fate and family
    But I will find you
    And kiss you
    Touch you
    Look into your eyes
    And rejoice
    Because what we have
    Will last
    It will overthrow the fates
    And stand the test
    Of time
    But until then
    I will wait for you
    Loving you always
    And drinking my own bitterness
    From the shattered chalice
    That is my love

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      This was a passionate love poem and it makes me wish with all my heart you will find happiness with this person once again.
    | Posted on 2004-03-15 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      nicely written... sad story, yet presented nicely... hope it all works out bro
    | Posted on 2004-02-24 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      This was outstanding, simply and purely. The emotion behind everysigle word just alters your whold mindset. I think this may be one of the best love poems I have ever read. And I don't really see any old stinking clichés. Awsome right, time to take a lil trip to my fave list....
    | Posted on 2004-02-24 00:00:00 | by Phall | [ Reply to This ]

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