i so love the black and white thing! and cello, well, i think you know my love of the cello! learah thinks i'm nuts! lol! anyway, i liked the picture this painted, very melancholy and like an old black and white movie. i felt like i was in an old theatre with a bag of popcorn, crying my eyes out! it's longer than most of your works... not that that means anything! great job! is this new?
Ohhh, I do like this... I'm on something of a black and white kick, being totally in love with my gal-pal girlinthephoto, she uses a lot of black and white photographs, and strangely enough, as a result, whenever I read her poetry the scenes I visualise are in B&W too!)
This is good... it's not that long tho lol! But I liked it.. I liked the old feel it gave me, the stroking hair and in my eyes I could hear an old locomotive giving a final hooting whistle as its wreathes of steam billowed around two embracing lovers, she standing with a one-legged teeter as they kissed.. it's very sad tho.. I like heartbreaking music too... but what happened? why was it the last kiss?!
This reminds me of something I heard or read once, though I can't really put a finger on it. It's a bit longer than you usually write, so that's cool. I like the beginning and the ending best. The beginning is very well written and spaced. The pause after "This scene" is very vocal. And the ending is well, just neat and insightful. Bravo!
This is very powerful Amy. I have recently watched a movie and thought about the way in took me into the flow, so the credits were a kind of... ending, to the time (a second) I understood it's just a movie. A hell good one. And the idea of standing in a rain reminds me one of Basia Trzetrzelewska's music videos, it was probably "Cruising for bruising", where there was such scene. Oh, sorry, just having thoughts. Beautiful piece.
i have a picture like bogart & bergman in 'casablanca'...nicely done. not sure about 'sobering' to describe the music in line 6-thinking more like 'melodramatic', but that doesn't seem to fit either. all those old movies [ones i mostly like] seem to have that type of musical score. anyway, not sure whether that word works or not. other than that very minor thing, excellent write. you seem to be out of your funk. :-)
life isn't the movies. that sucks. imagine you could choose which movie your life is, what would you choose?? hmmmm... anyway something longer from you. I like it. you've drawn a pretty clear picture of the scene. my favortie part was ' And mood lighting Forming long shadows That move with the sobering music' great lines and a great poem.