Dust left behind

Author: slickviper097 ASL Info:    18/f/georgia Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 163 /170 /44 Words: 46

Class/Type: Poetry /Longing Total Views: 1092 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 442

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Dust left behind

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a life. full of laughter smiles playgrounds imagination birthday parties brilliant colors sunshine. little days. a life. full of groans gloomy faces bruises reality no control darkness death. present days. just a memory faded like dust left behind on a long, lonely road.

Submitted on 2004-09-09 12:50:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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very moving and uplifting...So easy to visualize...and quite profound as well..i enjoyed this very much...the vivid color of the first stanza paired with the grey shades of the second...and then it all doesn't matter...great work!

| Posted on 2004-09-09 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]

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