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Dust left behind

Author: slickviper097
ASL Info:    18/f/georgia
Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 163 /170 /44
Words: 46
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Growing up we all come to the realization that life doesn't always go our way. We get disappointed a lot. Angry. But, we learn to accept it.

I have finally accepted.

Dust left behind

a life.
full of laughter
birthday parties
brilliant colors
little days.

a life.
full of groans
gloomy faces
no control
present days.

just a memory
like dust left behind
on a long, lonely road.

Submitted on 2004-09-09 12:50:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  very moving and uplifting...So easy to visualize...and quite profound as well..i enjoyed this very much...the vivid color of the first stanza paired with the grey shades of the second...and then it all doesn't matter...great work!
| Posted on 2004-09-09 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]

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