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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 695
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    Bytes: 360



    Description:
       this is about my ex. i saw hiom today and it hurt but i dint know. i dont want him back but i still love him . Seeing him made everything come back, the tears, pain, love and hate


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    today was the first time i saw you since skool ended and started agian.

    It broke my heart to look into your eyes.
    All the love, pain and ur silly little games
    came back to me.

    Wanting to be in your arms , so unsure of nething. U simply just walk away. But u seen me to?

    u changed everything i feel.




    Submitted on 2004-09-09 14:00:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I didn't mind the use of slang writing...ur a teen and that's part of what being a teen is about. You do have some spelling errors and in L5 I think you want 'so unsure of everything' but looking past that this is a piece that really speaks out and affects a reader instead of some of the ranting that goes in with younger writers. You've personalized it and told a story and that's why it worked for me...good piece.
    | Posted on 2004-09-15 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      you know that every love you go throuhgh in life some how leaves a ghost in your heart. i just hope you can find a new hope or a new heart to ease your pain and make your tears wash away like rain. theres a light and there is hope, as long as you are around i want to help you cope...with all thats wrong in this hard life... and show you that there is a God. thank you for being there for me, andy
    | Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by ibelikeso | [ Reply to This ]


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