Description: this is about my ex. i saw hiom today and it hurt but i dint know. i dont want him back but i still love him . Seeing him made everything come back, the tears, pain, love and hate
I didn't mind the use of slang writing...ur a teen and that's part of what being a teen is about. You do have some spelling errors and in L5 I think you want 'so unsure of everything' but looking past that this is a piece that really speaks out and affects a reader instead of some of the ranting that goes in with younger writers. You've personalized it and told a story and that's why it worked for me...good piece.
you know that every love you go throuhgh in life some how leaves a ghost in your heart. i just hope you can find a new hope or a new heart to ease your pain and make your tears wash away like rain. theres a light and there is hope, as long as you are around i want to help you cope...with all thats wrong in this hard life... and show you that there is a God. thank you for being there for me, andy
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