A Sense Of Trust
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A Sense Of Trust
Too much or not enough We were never able to decide And whatever brought us here Will hopefully take us back Even though all I can hear Is promises of better things to do Than wasting my time excusing you Summoned out of thin air Descending through layers Of memories and souvenirs You should have known that to Commit myself entirely to you I'd need a thousand sacrifices To know that I couldn't ever sacrifice What you are to my senses Like a radar of fate What path did make me cross your way Forgiven for everything yet still Finding comfort in dismay Break, twist, rip and shatter Whatever it is does it really matter What it could be If we weren't so mined with precaution Blasting out of Our desperately screaming Overwhelming emotions. |
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| I really enjoyed this, however, there are two lines that hit funny to me: "Like a radar of fate" and "If we weren't so mined with precaution" The imagery of both lines are very good, but the whole feel of the poem is very organic, so those two just feel out of place in the context of the whole poem. I did enjoy it alot though. | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ] | This is a unique look at trust, and its many levels of give and take. | The piece seems to speak of many other things, but the need for trust underlies many of the images. I especially like the sacrifices for sense. An interesting and creative write. Well done. | Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ] | |
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