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    dots Submission Name: nothingdots
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    Author: slybee22
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    5.59 - 93/64/27
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 358
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1112



    Description:
       This is not the perfect writing; it is less about actually writing properly and more about the raw emotion that bids words be typed to explain ones pain. Just to allow ones pain ( if only for an instant) to subsides.


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    dotsnothingdots
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    Sanity is a luxury of which I have none.
    Insanity is all I have and I have nothing

    My shoes look pretty bad but they‘re all I’ve got and I've got nothing.
    My hair is not so clean because I am not pristine, I will not be something I’m not.
    I have to be who I am because it’s all I’ve got, and I have nothing.
    I have nothing, I have nothing.

    The way to heaven also leads to hell, aint that something.
    Good intentions don’t always prevail, aint that something.
    You’ve got to try but your destined to fail, ain’t that something.
    The wounds have healed but still upon the scares you dwell, ain't that something.
    Oh no! That’s nothing, that is nothing and you’ve got nothing, that’s all you’ve got!

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    Trapped in a box stuck in sinking sand,
    Lend me a hand;
    No I don’t want your hand!
    Oh I know your plan!
    I Understand!
    I’ve got you now!
    I’ve got you now!
    I’ve got you now!
    Oh… I’ve got nothing.




    Submitted on 2004-09-10 09:21:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This reminds me a lot of Iron Maiden songs, where the lyrics are a story about someone or something, not a bad thing, in fact its great. I could see it being something, but I think that a little more rhyming would do the flow some good.
    | Posted on 2004-09-10 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      "face of those [who] put me"
    "all that I will have done [will] stain not only"
    "they're all I've got and I['ve] got nothing"
    The things i put in the [ ] are just suggestions of mine... and the line "I'm not preeteen" sort of didn't make sense to me... I don't know I think it would sound just as good with out it in there. Other than that I would just look at the gramatics of the whole thing (although they're lyrics... so it's not like it matters much!) I liked it, but it could use some work. -Eah
    | Posted on 2004-09-10 00:00:00 | by Eah | [ Reply to This ]



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