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Where I'm From


Author: Day DreaMeR
ASL Info:    19/F/somewhere
Elite Ratio:    6.23 - 853 /408 /53
Words: 154
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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this was something i had to write for language arts last week....so i thought id post it....our class was supposed to take a line from eberyones poem and turn it into a class poem but i dont have that one and it was pretty funny too but this is my individual one!!ooo and when i wrote this i was supposed to write it according to how the teacher wanted it to be.:-P


Where I'm From



I am from the Bluebonnets
From Mead and Herbal Essences
I am from the concrete street
(Which I have fell and played on)
I am from the snapdragons
The green grass
Where I laid with blades at eye level
I’m from card games and ice cream lovers
From Ken and Diane
I’m from days of groundings and somewhat clean rooms
From being told to look both ways and to scrub
I am from the Episcopal Church
Where I go to take some time for prayer
I’m from Temple, Texas and Massachusetts
Candy and spaghetti
From my baby days of my dad in Iraq
In the burning sands
The birth of my baby brother
Was a surprise and gift
On the side of my room
In my closet
Covered by a lid





Submitted on 2004-09-10 15:05:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was a good lil shout out 2 ur home. it's good that u represent where u live. it seems like this write has a lazy feel to it. i can see u just chillin in the grass eating ice cream and just walking down the street hanging with ur friends. i like the laid back feel to it.
"troy"
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  You've managed to throw yourself in a blender and scramble yourself up with a great show of self presentation. Its fun to watch you divulge in the trial and error a young writer goes, through, and I am enjoying watching your skillage grow.

MyX
| Posted on 2004-09-15 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really beautiful. You've captured something really amazing and elusive here. I award you ten points! (These points aren't really good for anything, it's just what I say to people who dun sumtin good.) Let me know when you write something else!
-Secret
| Posted on 2004-09-10 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this so much, i too have written a short poem about where and how i grew up, its nice to here sum 1 elses thanx for sharing and keep em cumin x x x x
| Posted on 2004-09-10 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
  bren...this is the best thing ive read of yours and think it took a homework assignment to bring it out...i love the lines three through seven...great lines...this is a wonderful poem...i actually have no complaints...lol...smiles ange
| Posted on 2004-09-10 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]


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