Description: This is older, and I know it's not great, but I feel dreadful, so it doesn't matter.
Kick Me -------------------------------------------
You're like that mean boy
who knocked down bird's nests and spider webs
just to make me cry,
but overripe, bruised peaches
seem tough compared to me,
scarred by gentle rain,
burned by my own tears,
while those more inadequate go unnoticed.
Perhaps I have "kick me" tattooed somewhere
invisible only to me.
"Perhaps I have "kick me" tattooed somewhere Invisible only to me"
is original and really does the thing. I think I know how it is, so I can relate. Again with just few words you get the point. Well, even if there is a 'kick me' on our back... just don't care about it. Only malicious people use such 'opportunity' to make them feel 'better'.
This is an interesting thought. If this were true, I think I've got lots of such instructions pinned on me like Ignore Me, Trample On My Feelings, Make Fun of Me... I bet they've covered up all the instructions I was born with like Love Me, Listen to Me, Understand Me... Nice write Cuddle.
this makes me so sad because i know how sensitive you are, just like me. the line "scarred by gentle rain/Burned by my own tears..." just makes me want to wrap you up into a warm and safe cocoon... this is a good poem, despite what you may say. very open and honest... and sad... *hugs* to you.
I really thought this was great. Everyone can relate to feeling weak compared to bruised peaches. (Excellent comparison.) I always enjoy your writings. Even this type, about being down. You make it seem not so down. That's the difference between a lot of other writes about being depressed or down, you make it seem bearable. Great job. -blt
well now I can't kick a woman cuz of the gentleman in me. You need to stop and smell the flowers. That's what I always tell people who are so wrapped up with their daily lives. Also need to spend time alone by themselves. you would be suprised at how refresh you feel after doing this.that's what i get from this poem. heh if ya still need a kick, i'll just give ya a full body message.
why so down?? you don't need to feel this way. you don't have "kick me" tattooed on you. I like your description of the mean boy, the line 'Who knocked down bird's nests and spider webs' is great. it's a good poem.
I really like this piece. It is very descriptive and gets the feeling across clearly. My fav part is: "While those more inadequate go unnoticed"... it's a very profound sentence and says more than you realise at first glance.