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    dots Submission Name: My Catdots
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    Author: colopoao
    ASL Info:    42/ Male / Hallowell Mai
    Elite Ratio:    4.89 - 62/55/18
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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       My cats have been catching mice in our house. I decided to try a haiku to describe the scene.


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    My cat sits right here
    A mouse runs inside the wall
    A paw swift as wind




    Submitted on 2004-09-11 11:30:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ten cats?!?! And I thought my having four was crazy! Ha ha, well. I liked this. One of my cats that live outside is always bringing "goodies" to our front porch and leaving them there. It could be rats, birds, lizzards.. anything. It's rather disgusting and what you've wrote has described it well. Heh.
    | Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]
      i could relate 'cause i have 10 cats... those paws are quick as the wind, aren't they?! and sometimes it's your flesh that's on the other end of that paw! cute little haiku!
    | Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice and short, and though not many people comment/view haiku, its always nice to write, as well as to read. This reminds of a scene in a garden, which is real, where the cat swung its claw and just caught the mouse on the stomach. What happened after that was not so describable.
    | Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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