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Through My Eyes


Author: Day DreaMeR
ASL Info:    19/F/somewhere
Elite Ratio:    6.23 - 853 /408 /53
Words: 78
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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ok i dont know if this is makes sense but im putting up with some shit and im sick of it!


Through My Eyes



As I close my eyes
I wonder why
why do I put up with all of this?
is the ache going to stop?
my heart feeling as if its heavy
no spirit seems to be left
what you havent seen
is everything through my eyes
with sadness written all over my face
still debating if its worth putting up with it all
as I open my eyes
hoping this will be the last of it all




Submitted on 2004-09-11 12:06:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I can relate to this poem
You are making the point that you want someone to listen to what your saying because you know darn well that it well help them to grow

Sometimes people are just too stubborn to understand this
I cant tell you how many times people have turned away from me only because they knew I was trying to help them
As crazy as that sounds its true

Keep writing
Always looking forward to new writes from you


And thanks for the comments
I want you to know you brightened up my day by saying what you did
Im glad my writes touch you as that is all im trying to do with my poems
touch the heart of those who went some positivity in there lifes
Take Care
And God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I understand more than you know. Actuall yI have a poem very similar to this one. I have been putting up with other people's crap almost my entire life annd after a while you just wonder if running and hiding or even dieing will make it all go away. I loved it. It was great. Short and simple but so full of wondernment.
Blessed Be!
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
  I know what it's like to put up with crap! I have been through a lot of stuff in my life, so it is good that you are expressing your emotion in a positive way insteading of doing something drastic. I think it your poem makes perfect sense and if you ever need someone to talk to I am here. :)
*Amanda*
| Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by fortressofwords | [ Reply to This ]
  hey bren you sound a little upset in this...and i agree with everyone else...on the line

what you haven't seen
is everything through my eyes

that is a very strong line...it says alot..i hope your feeling better... two wonderful writes in a row...smiles ange
| Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
  A very deep read.., This one sounds like you dug down into your inner core, and spilled your guts all over the screen. Wow, very serious sounding poem to me.., and very well wrote, indeed!.
| Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
  Writing is a good source of emotional ventilation isn't it? This write, for me at least, created a very powerful image, one like, some closes there eyes as chaos is around them. Then opens them again, and everything is back to normal. Great.

what you havent seen
is everything through my eyes

These were great lines, they confused me quite a bit to start with because there are so many different things they could mean. Now I'm all clear, I can look back think, wow, that made me think, which is what a good poem does.
| Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  don't worry, this makes perfect sense... it has very raw emotion... i like it cause it's not hidden behind fancy words.. you just tell what you feel... the only thing i can suggest is maybe put it into stanzas... it's very sad.. i hope things aren't like this for you right now...
| Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by besodemuerte | [ Reply to This ]


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