Through My Eyes
|
|
Description:
ok i dont know if this is makes sense but im putting up with some shit and im sick of it!
Through My Eyes
As I close my eyes I wonder why why do I put up with all of this? is the ache going to stop? my heart feeling as if its heavy no spirit seems to be left what you havent seen is everything through my eyes with sadness written all over my face still debating if its worth putting up with it all as I open my eyes hoping this will be the last of it all |
Submitted on 2004-09-11 12:06:00 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post
Comments
| I can relate to this poem You are making the point that you want someone to listen to what your saying because you know darn well that it well help them to grow Sometimes people are just too stubborn to understand this I cant tell you how many times people have turned away from me only because they knew I was trying to help them As crazy as that sounds its true Keep writing Always looking forward to new writes from you And thanks for the comments I want you to know you brightened up my day by saying what you did Im glad my writes touch you as that is all im trying to do with my poems touch the heart of those who went some positivity in there lifes Take Care And God Bless Ron | Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] | I understand more than you know. Actuall yI have a poem very similar to this one. I have been putting up with other people's crap almost my entire life annd after a while you just wonder if running and hiding or even dieing will make it all go away. I loved it. It was great. Short and simple but so full of wondernment. | Blessed Be!  | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ] | I know what it's like to put up with crap! I have been through a lot of stuff in my life, so it is good that you are expressing your emotion in a positive way insteading of doing something drastic. I think it your poem makes perfect sense and if you ever need someone to talk to I am here. :) | *Amanda* | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by fortressofwords | [ Reply to This ] | hey bren you sound a little upset in this...and i agree with everyone else...on the line | what you haven't seen is everything through my eyes that is a very strong line...it says alot..i hope your feeling better... two wonderful writes in a row...smiles ange | Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ] | A very deep read.., This one sounds like you dug down into your inner core, and spilled your guts all over the screen. Wow, very serious sounding poem to me.., and very well wrote, indeed!. | | Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ] | Writing is a good source of emotional ventilation isn't it? This write, for me at least, created a very powerful image, one like, some closes there eyes as chaos is around them. Then opens them again, and everything is back to normal. Great. | what you havent seen is everything through my eyes These were great lines, they confused me quite a bit to start with because there are so many different things they could mean. Now I'm all clear, I can look back think, wow, that made me think, which is what a good poem does. | Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ] | don't worry, this makes perfect sense... it has very raw emotion... i like it cause it's not hidden behind fancy words.. you just tell what you feel... the only thing i can suggest is maybe put it into stanzas... it's very sad.. i hope things aren't like this for you right now... | | Posted on 2004-10-26 00:00:00 | by besodemuerte | [ Reply to This ] | |
23905
Edit/Delete posts
Create Writing
Create Journal