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Ordinary Words

Author: J. A. Clark
ASL Info:    25/m/GA
Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 50 /51 /12
Words: 164
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This poem is about how great, powerful, and comforting God is. Compared to Him, I am nothing, but still he chooses to talk to me on my level.

Ordinary Words

I am only a moment in time.
Just a single thread in a quilt,
A wavering leaf caught in a breeze,
a single rock on a bed of silt.

But still I cry out to you with my voice,
When I'm troubled, I look to you.
You hear my cries,
and you hold me tight.
I know if anything overwhelms me,
You'll hold me through the night.

I speak with ordinary words
But you speak with a storm.
Your voice lights up the earth as lightning,
And shakes its foundations as thunder.

I hear you speak with the wind as if to say
"Be quiet, sit and stay."
I see you move in the trees
to show me that you are there.
I see you all around me, in every movement of the birds.
But still you choose to speak with ordinary words.

Submitted on 2004-09-11 20:15:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is a very sweet poem. everybody looks for somebody who's there for you. and it seems like you have found that special somebody. anyway those question marks are a bit distracting. go to "Edit/Delete" on the right side and change it to the punctuation marks that they should be. your first stanza was really good, very descriptive. but you have to explain me how she speaks with a storm and all that might you've described and still speaks ordinary words. cause in my mind it doesn't fit so well. all this might and power and then just ordinary?? I can't bring that together. but that's just me. anyway welcome to the site. I look forward to read more from you.
| Posted on 2004-09-12 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this one because i really understand it and i can really comment on it!

The whole "single moment in time" signifies the speaker having low self esteem, or no self confidence. The other being described here obviously means a lot to the speaker. I think this was beatifully done. You really feel the emotion. Great usage of words. my only complaint really is that "I" was used a little much. Otherwise great job!
| Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by roxygirl239 | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the whole "single moment in time" kind of thing. I thought it was nice. You are very good at providing the reader with a good deal of imagery. It's like I could picture the entire piece as I read it. You are a great writer, I'm glad to see you have joined, keep up the good work!
| Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! Powerful and moving to say the least. . . this was my favorite part (I've made a few changes. . . ).
I speak with ordinary words
But you speak like a storm
Your voice lights up the earth as lightning
And shakes its foundations as thunder.
One more thing. . . on the line that says "I know if it overwhelms me", be more specific and replace "it" with "life". Anyhoo, like I said the description was awesome. . . it's like this person makes you feel completely safe and sound, unable to be harmed. . . YAY!
| Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]

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