Description: I just wrote this on general experiences nothing recent. It was an abandoned poem, and i decided to revive it. I haven't wrote much lately. So please feel free to say whatver comes to your mind.
i hope it doesn't come across to you as me not taking your poem seriously,but to sum it up in one word,cute.you seem to genuinely want to provide someone with some valuable assistance and we all ,sometimes, need to be reached out to.i hope that you succeed in your endeavours and wish you all the best.
Bravo for you! A boy who's been injured by antoher girl, pretty much left senseless from your description, and because of your love for him you're trying to revive him, much as you revived this poem. A few grammatical errors: "I buy a locket" should be "I'd buy a locket" and "Close my heart" should be "Close to my heart". Other than that, great job! -Secret
ahhh...wow this is beautiful...like a prayer almost...heavenly anyway.
made me feel cared for and secure...at ease with the world so to speak. not to mention that all the good things are in the right place... imagery,clearity, highs and lows...and the end was brilliant! what a wonderful read...so glad i tripped over your page...awesome find...now wathcing you kelly
Submission Name: Desert Storm
A few grammatical errors: "I buy a locket" should be "I'd buy a locket" and "Close my heart" should be "Close to my heart". Other than that, great job!
