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    dots Submission Name: Painting Youdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This isn't about changing someone. It's about wishing others could see him as I do. It's also not about my current boyfriend.


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    I'd like to paint you on the eyes of others
    in colors that exist only in my mind,
    and show the world as I see you,
    and bring out the beauty
    I see inside of you.
    I'd paint your mousy hair a new shade of gold.
    I'd paint those eyes the bluest blue.
    I'd make your skin glow
    in my own rainbow of colors.
    I'd fix that busted knee,
    that crooked smile
    those callused hands,
    and let the world see the man I see
    the man I love.






    Submitted on 2004-02-25 06:18:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this could be about a friend or maybe a father...see him as i see him...see the beauty in him i see...
    this has nice feel to it...


    like despite your flaws...i see the beauty...but there is a sadness...cause the need to paint over what is to create something different in order to appeal...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      How beautiful... and how true... how often do we ache to show the world all the lovely things we find in those we love, and live in frustration because we cannot place our rose-tinted shades on the eyes of another. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a beautiful little write, it so so so true, also. definitely a fav.
    | Posted on 2004-03-13 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to this so well, ..as I read I thought of some people I know, and have known, that were so beautiful and special,..yet most others didn't get beyond that visual impression. Oddly, these are most likely the friends or acquaintances that we treasure the most, the diamond in the rough.Your imagery and gentle naturally flowing words enhance your perspective here.. Very good write Amy, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-02-25 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      great imagery..... excellent wording that seems to be well thought out... non-punctuation seems to give your writes a soothing effect on the reader... so I disagree with apollo.... he seems to have a punctuation fetish as he seems to suggest that on almost every one of his comments.... not sure... I like the style... short and to the point... another nice one.. keep it up!!
    | Posted on 2004-02-25 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful poem..beautiful imagery...but it needs better puntuation to create the mood and the tone of the poem that evokes emotions and a little depth in diction will do...nice
    | Posted on 2004-02-25 00:00:00 | by APOLLO | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed your poem. I read that it is not about your boyfriend. The person you seem to describe in your poem, maybe an older gentleman. Very sweet and touching
    | Posted on 2004-02-25 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]


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