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    dots Submission Name: Final wordsdots
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    Author: B Adams
    ASL Info:    18 Male Canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 41/59/12
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       I wrote this at the age of 16 after my most emotional break up. This one was more disapointing then any other.


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    No new records for my personal life
    The days have been numbered for now
    Best friends we were and nothing more
    I wanted to love, you loved to leave
    The chase is done.
    No more dreams of future days
    No more wedding rings
    The road thus forth was smooth, yet rugged
    Paved, yet foot printed something of heavy
    Friends we will be, for friends is all we were
    A friend to me is a friend indeed, and indefinitely
    You pulled the Blanket from over my eyes, and replaced it with a pale
    Back to ground zero
    But all was not lost.
    New openness has been found, a new outlet
    The people on which I can rely have augmented to three
    And one of those is thee
    Your view on life, and life within it, is unmatched
    Real life living, and living a real life
    A smile is a cowardís way out
    A smile can not cure a problem, less hide it
    You taught me well
    Now learn me this
    Itís you I wanted
    Itís you Iíll miss
    I knew this day was coming true
    Now thereís nothing left to do
    Life is what you make it, so make it a good life I will
    I put you before all, and you put all before me
    I followed you around, but around me you looked
    You inspired me to achieve, you achieved no inspiration from me
    Done is done, Over is gone
    I miss you now but not for long
    There are plenty of fish out in the sea
    Maybe the next one will swim WITH me




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      now THIS is what i was waiting to read. it is without a doubt my very very favourite poem of yours. love it, everything about it. hands down it's the best you've written even if you don't think so. i really don't know why no one's said anything about it...maybe you've left them speechless
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by kair | [ Reply to This ]


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