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    dots Submission Name: Reproduced Thoughtsdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This is more about visual art than writing, but I have synesthesia and see words when I think/write too, so it cuts both ways.


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    dotsReproduced Thoughtsdots
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    If this pen could act like a copier machine
    wired into my brain
    I might be able
    to properly reproduce my thoughts,
    the conceptions of my art
    and not have to translate
    the language of the mind
    into that of the hand,
    for these representations
    are like oft-circulated rumours
    compared to the truth.




    Submitted on 2004-09-13 04:21:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow nice thoughts yeah that would be nice. I find it hard sometimes to truely express my thoughts into words. well written you seem to have reproduced some nice thoughts in this one
    | Posted on 2004-09-15 00:00:00 | by Kapone | [ Reply to This ]
      That's true, but wonder, if it were be so perfect, where would the art go? The art of poetry, the art of words? I guess it's needed. Nice one. Hold on, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      The last 3 lines were so apt to what I just watched. 24 hour party people. It was the story of the Happy Mondays, Joy Division and New Order as you know. Told from the viewpoint of Tony Wilson. Peter Hook said the reason so many people wanted to join a punk band after seeing the Sex Pistols wasn't because they played so badly that anyone could go out and do it, but because they sounded so bad. He added that the real instigator was the guy working the mixing desk; an unsung innovator. Sorry if this isn't the usual poetry post, but I wanted you to know. Love, Paul. x
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by buttsee | [ Reply to This ]
      I wish I could do the same...however sometimes I think words (being "representations" of thought and not exact copies) can never truly convey true thought and feeling...The stuggle to come close in writing is frusterating as hell...(the fact that we'll never truly be understood). The best writers can only come close...I like your piece.
    | Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]
      Fascinating, how many times do i try to find the words of transcendental power? To transport the reader to the place of my expressions, to acheived and produce the emotions i shared,but never fully reaching such a task.A great piece,though i wish i knew and felt what you have fekt when writing this! LOL!
    | Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very original and interesting piece. you're saying that you can never reproduce 100% of what's your mind when you write a poem. well, sometimes you stumble over words or don't find the right expression. so I think this is quite true. I especially like your ending.
    'For these representations
    Are like oft-circulated rumors
    Compared to the truth'
    great lines, powerful. a really good poem. well done.
    | Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      nice job. xerox as a metaphor, hmmm? never thought of anything like that. like the way you link this all together. good job! nothing I can find to nit. :-)
    | Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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