The Belladonna
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The Belladonna
The most deadly of herbs to eat one cherry is a dare A doom survived is rare though even if there is a cure How many seek this truth in question? Is she the "beautiful lady" that she's said to be? Is known by all, but mostly said in Italy Making women seem attractive it's juice was used to pale their skin The berries work is very active Just a drop inside the eyes, made them shine dialating in a way to surprise Here's a myth, take a think; is this true by all these hints? Originating from the ancient Europe time of Montagues and Capulettes gave a condemned battle hope a decided love,a greatest attribute. Comsuming her was that great action his life for millions and one girl Now his eyes they die and blacken detail noticed fine and clear, by the one that was his mate glass half empty was right near knowing well this was their fate took a second, endless wait. took a drink! gone and lost with no more link loss was greater than you think. Only took a pair in love, and growingly they conquered war. Battle ended with her help, with her poison lowered hell,a bloody gore. |
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this is the story of Romeo and Juliet and the "Belladonna", The cure for the two feuding families and how, through the death of their beloved children they made peace!! ~Vladimir09| | Posted on 2006-05-23 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ] | I noticed the mention of Romeo and Juliet at the end of the piece, and the mention of a fruit at the beginning of the piece, and I just know the two things intertwine somehow, but I can't seem to figure out exactly how this works. I like when you said, "here's a myth; take a think;"...that was a really cool way to word it. I think that's when you started in on Romeo and Juliet. Hmm...it's a good piece, I just can't seem to figure the whole thing out. But it sounds really good. Good job. | | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ] | Hmm, I don't really know what to say and that's fairly rare. Overall, I like this poem, but it seems to be a little confusing at times. I feel as if you meant to start with one thought and wandered off a little bit. However, it has great feeling behind it. That's important. If you want someone to know how you feel then you've got to tell them how you feel. | | Posted on 2004-10-28 00:00:00 | by Victoria | [ Reply to This ] | |
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