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    Author: redthewitch
    ASL Info:    36/f/tiny rural village
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 267/175/26
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       Just some thoughts I am working on.


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    reminiscent songs on the radio
    stir up old thoughts of you
    days gone by
    so long gone
    I can barely see you
    when I look back




    Submitted on 2004-09-13 12:04:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very thought-provoking! I'm not a fan of long poems most of the time, not because I'm too lazy to read them, but because they so often overanalyze the subject. You have created a very potent picture using a spare choice of words, and I say BRAVO to you. Definitely cool.
    -Secret
    | Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      I'd say too that short and sweet does the job here. (If that made sense.) This was a pleasant read and though it is not complicated, the scene is very easy to picture. Nice work and thanks for posting.
    | Posted on 2004-09-25 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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