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    dots Submission Name: Mercydots
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    Author: slybee22
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    5.59 - 93/64/27
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 287
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 922



    Description:
       Many thought ran were running thru my mind as I wrote this as I read it not this is my description of it.

    A soul trapped wanting freedom, being bombarded by the wants and need of so many catering to all but there own. This soul truly will not do for itself unless allowed to so it cries out for the permission to.

    this soul will not stop because it is addicted to all the pain inflicted upon itself because others gain pleasure, addicted and will not stop because somewhere deep inside this soul is willing to destroy itself to save help thou dear to it, inside this soul just wishes to destroys itself so it cries out for help, screaming " please take away this burden don't you see what its doing to me."

    Anyways you might see something different.


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    dotsMercydots
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    Mercy me,
    My mercy pleas,
    Have mercy upon me.

    Addiction, music is my addiction and one that I could never bare to lose.
    You know this, yet you ask me (no force) me to choose.
    Your words they pull at my insides.
    From this no good can arise.

    Mercy me,
    My mercy pleas,
    Have mercy upon me,
    So have mercy upon me.

    Mother I have lost touch of reality.
    Sanity is nothing but a word to me.
    What you call normalcy would be hell for me.
    Soul corroding words, forming lies making my life pure obscenity.

    My music means life or death to me.

    Mercy me,
    My mercy pleas,
    Have mercy upon me.
    Have mercy upon me.

    Is it that you cannot see that you are leading me to a realm of insanities.

    Please have mercy on me.




    Submitted on 2004-09-13 22:54:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hi! in the 4th stanza i think this line " words having meaning none" should be " ...having no meaning...it's better that way for me. " what means it" this confuses me...maybe you mean "what it means?' correct me if i'm wrong...and this line " is it that you cannot see that..." really confuses me..you should change it...well it's all that i can say...good luck!
    meh,
    jen
    | Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]



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