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    dots Submission Name: The Incredible, The Monsterdots
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    Author: mixedemotions00
    ASL Info:    21/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 561/361/63
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Angry
    Total Views: 340
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 956



    Description:
       Not my favorite, but Dan in a nutshell.


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    dotsThe Incredible, The Monsterdots
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    Black and white,
    his face shiny and lacquered
    in a heart-shaped picture frame.
    Also glued in her mind,
    but in full color,
    in all of his browns and blues and reds.

    The place of honor
    reserved for him on her
    bedside table.
    Cocked slightly towards her pillow,
    slightly towards her door,
    so she can gaze
    as she enters the room
    and her dreams.

    Gorgeous is his appearance.
    Destructive is his manner,
    and monstrous is his appetite.
    Always over-anticipating,
    biting off
    more than he can chew.

    But what he does
    manage to
    bite off,
    rip out of her
    barring anesthetics,
    he chews thoroughly
    and spits out on the floor.

    Unsatisfied.
    Discontent.
    Self-piteous and pious.
    He leaves her
    bitter and
    scarred.




    Submitted on 2004-09-13 23:30:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      all that i can think of to say is that whoever you wrote this for must be a complete [censored] and a total jerk! ive had a few go's with people like that...use you...or they stick with you until they find like your best friend or somebody to bang...lead you on...hanging in the air because you think you really care bout them and then they just let you fall and fall until you break your neck on the ground...GRRR! i feel the anger in this..

    nice write

    Rhaine
    | Posted on 2005-02-05 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      harsh...this one is tortured in a depth that leaves scars...very moving
    the feeling of passion and pure longing...then it twists...and there's an overwhelming sense of loss and betrayal.
    very powerful and clearly spoken
    on to the next
    btw
    i'm kelly
    so happy to read you...hehe
    | Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      In a way this piece almost reminded me of disease and the way it can rip you apart inside as well as the lies of a lover. I especially liked the fourth verse.
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by littledifferent | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this one..it reminds me of the poem love smack me one more time...i like the last lines. it's like showing a picture in my mind...good descriptions...nice!
    meh,
    jen
    | Posted on 2004-09-13 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]



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