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    dots Submission Name: A Bookworm and a Silverfishdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Uh, I picked up an old book with a silverfish on it (I don't normally get bugs in my house, but I took the critter outside). That's all my twisted mind needs sometimes. I'll likely add to this and edit it. By "stay of execution," I mean the time it takes to read the sentence.


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    dotsA Bookworm and a Silverfishdots
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    Dog-eared pages hunt foxing
    while a bookworm
    becomes bait for a silverfish,
    and whole groups of words
    are sentenced to die
    at the end of a period,
    their stay of execution.






    Submitted on 2004-09-14 03:59:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Are you telling me that this is where the punctuation went? Threw it right out of the book with the silverfish? Stay of execution... An order whereby a judgment is precluded from being executed for a specific period of time? Now you've got my colon in a twist: have to pause here and wait for a letter to be delivered. Oh, there you go then, and no A from this bee, see? You've written better.
    | Posted on 2004-09-15 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      kind of strikes me as sometihng lewis carroll might write. very 'alice in wonderland'-ish and surreal-i think it works very well
    | Posted on 2004-09-15 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      OH yeah...we have a winner for best 'make me think and wrap my mind around this' poem of the day...yes cuddle another fav girl...you do rock and roll them out of the park don't you.
    every line is filled with perfect metaphors..
    simply brilliant...wish I thought of it...
    lol
    thanks for askin...I loved it
    ~clay~
    | Posted on 2004-09-15 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. I think this is one of your best poems, though it is one of the shorter. Silverfish is such a whimsical name, that in this context it was perfect. I absolutely love this poem. I think this is going to have to be my first favorite!

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very unique little peice, the wording is strange but comforting. it is different than I expected it to be, probably because I had to go back above the poem to find out what a silverfish. I like the use of words, worm and fish. quite good. the play on words is brilliant.
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this. The play on words is amazing. It makes me think of another world living life in a book. I'm glad you wrote this, it is good to read. Normal yet not, anyhoo, awesome poem!
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by Poechick13 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the description of the book very much. very original that the bookworm gets bait for a silverfish. the only thing I don't like so much is the last line. I don't know - maybe mostly cause I don't fully understand the sentence. explanation please cause my translation doesn't make so much sense. but the rest is really good. very well done, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was a remarkable innovation of brilliance. I am lucky to see this work in my current life time because in the next life I may not be as lucky. This poem made me think of how the world works today and in all seriousness...I do kind of despise the World scene, BUT NOT THIS POEM. This sounds like it was intentionally meant to be nothing more than a record of witnessing a silverfish on a book but as I read the poem with my eyes widened, I took much much more out of it...once again cuddledumplin amazes me...
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by SKillz_Heckle | [ Reply to This ]


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