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    dots Submission Name: Too Much Ceremonydots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsToo Much Ceremonydots
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    There is too much ceremony between us
    fom the pleasant "How are you?"
    to the "I'll see you later"
    with a closed-mouthed kiss,
    but in those tight lips,
    we keep the words we want to say,
    the pledges of undying love
    and cherished friendship,
    but we don't dare speak them,
    for we fear the words
    won't match those spoken by the other,
    and we stick to the routine
    like we're dancing a number
    from an old musical.




    Submitted on 2004-09-14 04:32:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that is so sadly true, it is a shame how much of courtship is a dance that is already laid and how those who dare are the only ones who take the chance and find true love.
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      "I won't use words again
    they don't mean what I meant
    they don't say what I said"*

    It's true that people are afraid of talking 'bout some personal or sensual things. Like they were afraid of loosing sth by saying it.

    Fortunately, sometimes words are not needed... sometimes they are even not enough.

    I like the idea of comparing routine to dancing a number from a musical.

    Very good poem.

    *Suzanne Vega
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      I heart musical theatre!

    And we stick to the routine
    Like we're dancing a number
    From an old musical

    Love this analogy. For some reason, I see Pirates of Pennzance. (sorry, I'm kind of a tech. theatre nerd). Anyway, this is very insightful and intelligent.

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sharp insight into the human condition. I enjoyed how the closed-mouthed kiss morphed into keeping words locked behind tight lips.
    Reminds me of Awkward's reference to "thin lips" the angry look of disapproval we seek to avoid with our tight ones. Well done,
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      the fear of telling somebody your true love because the other might not have such deep feelings so you better stick to your daily routine and keep it a bit shallow. bad situation. I hope it's not personal. anyway I like your beginning three lines in which you described the routine very vivid. and your last comparison to the number from a musical is really good. all in all a very good poem. I like it.
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]


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