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    dots Submission Name: grace of disasterdots
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    Author: brokenmuse
    ASL Info:    26/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 756/734/161
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsgrace of disasterdots
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    my hands are old
    and skin is just like paper
    floating in the wind
    tornado force
    in hurricane form
    ripping with its
    invisible hands
    at the roof of my house
    tearong at the door
    to my heart
    pounding down
    like iron weights
    on a killer gust
    of wind




    Submitted on 2004-09-14 09:40:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not 100% sure what you're getting at either, but the imagery is really nice. It's got an odd beauty even if ít defies the logic of my tired mind.
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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