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    dots Submission Name: The Irrelevance of timedots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 485
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1557



    Description:
       this was written 7/03/03
    Its an old piece I remembered I wrote after reading a Bit o Phil by Ontologicalamity.
    ITs an oldy and you can see the difference between it and how my style is now, but I like this one and felt the need to post it


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    dotsThe Irrelevance of timedots
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    What is the relevance of time?
    With age it seems to only serve
    as a nagging reminder

    Constantly showing
    how there is so little
    time between the things
    We must do and how it seems there is
    never time for the things we long to do

    I can recall summers spent as a child
    Oh the innocence of youth
    Not a care in the world
    each day seemed to
    stretch on and on forever
    Those days are now nothing more than
    a dream or fond memory

    When does the
    Child stop living only for today
    and becomes The adult living for
    all their remaining tomorrows?

    From childhood were programmed to
    Plan ahead
    Invest
    Work hard
    Save up
    Show faith
    In God
    And the consumer ideal

    But property cant
    With stand time for all things age
    the only thing you own
    The only title you truly
    hold is you soul,
    your Memories, your dreams

    Nothing else
    will move on with you
    nothing else matters

    Now is the time
    to live for each other
    to purchase pleasant memories
    With our laughter

    It's the time to dream
    of things we can build
    things we can create
    because we should live
    in each moment as if
    tt were eternity

    Do not measure
    your life in years
    instead define it
    with your passion




    Submitted on 2004-09-14 16:31:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't really have any complaints, just that there are a few spelling errors. I was awestruck by this poem, it's so real and yet so spectacular at the same time. I have to add this one to my favorites. Keep up the good work, and being since this is an older work, I can't wait to see the newer stuff!
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      damn good job. time is such a rigid thing, you cant physically move forward or backward. I love the last stanza, it really puts the rest of the poem into perspective and gives the ending a nice little unexpected quist
    | Posted on 2004-09-14 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      the fourth stanza really stuck out to me, i've asked myself something similar a thousand times, i don't think it's so much time, i'm always on the edge of some epiphany..figuring it out but not yet;) the final stanza is cool too, hopeful and honest.

    as for playing guitar..it's easy;) you'd be surprised just how easy it can be...as long as you don't want to be eddie van halen or eric clapton...and personally i think they suck anyway:D
    | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]


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