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    dots Submission Name: Greeddots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGreeddots
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    Man is killing himself and his own
    building up what cannot support his life
    and killing all that will.
    Wanting what he wants,
    not what he needs.
    Man is greed
    killing what he needs.




    Submitted on 2004-02-25 22:26:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmm... accurate. Disturbingly so. "The love of money is the root of all evil..." Scary. Well... I know of 10 acres of virgin broadleaf forest that will never be developed. Not if I have anything to say about it. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting. It's kinda throwing how you start off with no rhyming, but then you sorta rhyme...wwhich since this is a shorter poem i guess is not really devloping a trend. I like how you don't just go on and on describing one thing, but sorta come right out and say it...but not.
    | Posted on 2004-03-10 00:00:00 | by deadlydarkdevil | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked how direct it was, you didn't meander on and on, I would have like some visuals, but I don't need it, all and all good read keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-02-25 00:00:00 | by hidden lady | [ Reply to This ]


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